In Tandem - Comments

First and foremost, your layout is prettiful!

So... the first thing I notice about this fic is that it is dialogue-driven. It's not exactly a bad thing, but it's just not something I prefer. I love to read stories with more descriptions as compared to just lines and lines of dialogues.

However, that being said, I love how the story flows. I like how nervous Zayn 'sounded' through his conversation with his mother and NO! The horror of embarrassing childhood photos. Everyone dreads that when they're taking a special someone to meet the family. So I think you get that part on point.

It's super adorable how quickly Raveena got along with Zayn's family and it says a lot about her as a person. Without so many words and overused description, you manage to paint her as a friendly, down-to-earth girl and it's great to read. Maybe you'd changed my mind about the descriptions being important in this story. Even without so much words, you manage to convey everything perfectly.

I guess I'm just rambling now. I like the family-oriented atmosphere you painted in this fic and I love how everything just flows perfectly together.

Good job!

"Come meet Zayn's bae" Haha I loved that!!!
If my mom said that, i'd be in what the fuck mode.
But I'm glad stories with Zayn still exist.
This was cute.
& I love Apples to Apples.

I'm screaming for an eternity. I love that you name dropped my Instagram

But this is seriously the best thing ever. Zayn is so FUCKIN CUTE, we'd make a great ass pair, just judging from this beautiful one shot. Zayn's entire family sounds so cute I could cry. This is what I want in a future significant other (aka Zayn tbh bc why would I settle??????)

ILYSM SAM

NOOOOOOO THIS IS ADORABLE.

i love zayn's mom. drilling into him about the scarf and the lady-fella and BABY PICTURES. she's a gem. that's how you bring a girl into the family, bring out the bathtub pics.

i love how important family is in this piece, by the by. that seems to almost never happen, so this isn't just adorable but so refreshing.

"Wow, your home is beautiful."

I smirk. "Not as beautiful as you." zayn getcha cheesy ass outta here.

DAD IS SETTING UP THE KARAOKE MACHINE OH NO. i can only imagine how that plays out. that's gold and i'm just gonna sit here and imagine zayn being dragged into some karaoke shenanigans. beautiful. i knew zayn's mom was a gem omg she knows the instagram name. AND THE SUMMARY QUOTE. i laughed so loud, it was almost embarrassing.

me too zayn sorry! just sucks ass ok i know everyone is cheating when i play so that's probably the case for you too zayno don't worry

this was so precious. how are you so good at the cute things. wowowow.

did someone say gorgeous layout hot damn zayn

bc i'm so there

For a second, I didn't recognize it was Zayn in the banner. Once I did, I was like, hot damn. This sounds good! One thing though, you put original instead of fan fiction. Might wanna change that! :)

AHHHHH
I'M SO EXCITED