February 8th, 2016 at 10:23am
This was great. I like that you kept with the theme of science going wrong and not ever creating the "perfect" soldier like they're always trying to. But then switching it up to make it so it's an actual human that was created instead of a robot/cyborg thing that gained emotions was a nice little addition.
I thought it was interesting that Captain Miller was the only one who wanted to treat Lani like a human, and that may have been what saved his life. I feel like if he didn't, she might have tried to suppress her emotions and not have jumped to save him from the grenade.
The only thing is that I wish it focused a bit more on the birthmark. I know it was mentioned, but I think it would have been cool to maybe have her deal with the emotions that come along with realizing she has limited lives or something like that. But of course, with this being a one-shot it's kind of hard to add everything in.
But yes, I quite enjoyed this! Good job!
@ louis.
@ hibernus@ losing control.
Thank you for the comments... I'm glad you all like it :)