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  • Michael Westen

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    So, I come here for two reasons - I saw that Nereid recommended it + I'm a sucker for Harry Styles.

    I really hope this isn't dead dead because I really enjoyed reading the little that you do have. It gives an insight into the back story without giving all the details and gives a glimpse into what the rest of the story will hold without giving away everything.

    Let me know if you continue with it!
    October 8th, 2017 at 01:35am
  • Nereid

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    Great update. Loved seeing more of the details unfold in this story. Hope you continue to write this!
    July 11th, 2017 at 10:45pm
  • lo_lla

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    I like that it's a slow start, tbh. Some stories are very quick to jump in (I'm guilty of this), but when a slow climb comes around, it always makes for something much more satisfying and realistic. That saiiiiid, I'm excited to keep up with how you develop everything!! Thank you for sharing your work <3
    July 11th, 2017 at 10:40pm
  • Nereid

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    I'm not a fan of one direction, but I am a fan of good writing, and my love of good writing vastly outweighs the other so I'll be sticking around to see this story through.

    The first chapter is brilliant. It's an introduction to a story that somehow tells you everything and nothing at the same time, which is perfect for this whirlwind romance story I feel like you're going to create. You've introduced your lead characters in a natural way by making your introduction like this, and already explained the backstory for them. Fantastically done!

    As I said, not a fan of one direction, but if the writing is as good as yours is in the first chapter I'll happily stick around to see how it unfolds :)
    July 10th, 2017 at 07:39am
  • pocahontas.

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    Second time's the charm... I absolutely adore this layout and how all of your images - including your character GIFs - all tie together in black and white! It's so clever that the summary is so cliche, all while pointing out such. That last line sets this up as a story with potential to be different than the average cliches, though, which is great.

    HOW THE STORY BEGINS: For some reason I was expecting something longer. Despite being so short, this actually does very well in introducing your main female character, as well as her encounter with who I am assuming to be Harry. I feel like it would have been a cool addition to describe what she was supposed to be at home for and why she wasn't but that's just me - plus it can always be written in later~

    WELCOME TO NEW YORK: This is the absolute perfect length, especially with alternation between heavy description and heavy dialogue. The development of Mia's living situation is definitely catching my interest - mostly because it could create more drama later on. Dani's personality shines through really well in this chapter, which is a bonus because a roommate is generally an important part of someone's life - I'm assuming she'll be an important part of this story.

    HEY, ANGEL: I'm a little confused here. The narrator, previously named Amelia/Mia, answers to the name Alison/Ally. Trixie is pretty great, which makes this chapter a bonus. "Sometimes [that happens when I go out.] Those were't for me though." lmfao She seems like she'd be one of those accidentally-comedic people and I love that. I felt like I didn't really learn much about Mia/Aly here other than she now works for Trixie and seems to take the abnormal with a grain of salt. I can't wait for the next chapter though so I've subscribed~
    June 22nd, 2016 at 08:58am