Seventeen mentions of the word "you" in that form and as "your". Yes, I counted them, but I did it for a reason. The sheer volume of it is really striking - that is shows the dominance, how the narrator's world almost completely exists around this mysterious person - you. With this overuse of the word (and its use in almost every sentence) you make such a powerful statement, and that's only further emphasised with the words themselves, of how the narrator isn't the one who could leave, no matter the violence, and of how they completely fell apart when they were left alone. It's very stark to see how clearly you've conveyed the bleak reality that many people suffer from, of how leaving is something not an option and of how someone can be manipulated to such an extent that they practically fall to pieces when they no longer have that person to rely on, like they've been conditioned to do.
June 8th, 2017 at 02:14am