April 3rd, 2016 at 06:58am
ready ready readyUpon reading the chapter:
I liked your hook. The idea of the prison halls and the fact that you describe it as it is was mind blowing captivating. There's some cruel humor behind it, I don't really know though. Whoever is the main character, I'm seriously excited to read on!
I definitely enjoyed the way Celeste was described as bored. The guy seems very observant of his surroundings and I liked that about him. He must be really nervous to be interviewing this criminal. Yo, I'd be too
oh my goodness
Celeste is beautiful and deadly
Two things that shouldn't be together lol
he's so so nervous awwww That's so cute
BUT DUDE, MAN UP. DON'T SHOW YOUR AFFECTION OR NERVOUSNESS TO HER
As much as I hate Celeste I admire her confidence and her strength. I could tell by the way she talks that she's ambitious and she knows what she wants. She shows it through a horrid way but it's still something lol.
She's also a softie, despite it barely showing lol. When her brother is mentioned, I could tell she cared about him. Then she became all bitter when his wife was brought up~ so I thought Cel only felt this way because she knew her brother would go far and not be held down to be a lower person than Martha (IDK THIS IS JUST A THEORY LOL). I love that this keeps me guessing and guessing~ It's so mysterious.
She basically has him in the palm of her hands lol
SHE IS SO BLUNT and that shows me what her personality is
she takes things lightly, as well. like all of those crimes and lives mean nothing to her. again, she's so interesting.
She has this strange correlation to love and murder. I mean, the romantic in me is aww'ing at the way she's describing Harry's eyes and appearance. But then I remember who she really is and just hate her again.
She's so cruel and wicked when talking about Abigail, for example, "Although his bitch wife did have everything coming to her.” She doesn't even flinch about talking like this to an official~ she really doesn't have much to lose again.
I love that how competent she is with this cruel world she made, especially here, "Because I may be stuck in this body, but my mind is infinite, like a celestial body of stars."
Even when she was about to get the injection, she somehow made me more curious. She's talking about herself like a goddess.
I love Jacob's character. Him and Cel are polar opposites~ he's so shy and shifty and Cel is demanding and straight forward. Yet it's like their personalities fit perfectly when they spoke to each other.
Your ending gave me chills. CHILLS.
I forgot to mention in Insanity's comment but I really love both of your story layouts. It has a great kick and a great deal of beautiful implanted in it. Your writing truly impressed me! I need to start reading more of your stories because WOW AND MORE WOWs are running through my head when I read something of yours. You have this great way of capturing the readers with great descriptions and a badass way of structuring your sentences. I felt like I was watching a movie while reading parts of this entry! Marvelous job on this entry!
And in only one chapter you told me so much about the two main characters, their motivations, their past, their lives. I really like how you did that.
I also love the characters. One so inoccent, curious but not naive. He was changed by her, seeing more than just the monster she was painted to be. I liked that about him.
And the other main character was someone who changed so much because of a simple event. As the protagonist said, she could have been anything, become anyone. It's sad that she went down the path of murder and death.
I really liked how you ended the story, the quote so powerful and meaniful. Defiantly recommending this story!