The Girl From the Woods - Comments

And update! Yes!
Brandt needs to know, but he needs to see to believe it seems. I hope it works!

Woah... this story is intense. In a great way!
There is something about the simplicity that you have here that really just adds to the shock value. Like the first chapter that was in Rachel's POV. As a reader it felt like a dive into ice-cold water. You just threw us right into the deep end with this story. Simple, clean and bare of excess baggage. Never mind having me hooked, I need to read on just to keep up!

This is some of the most engaging, suspenseful writing I have read here. The way you shift perspectives in the narrative works well and you pull it off effortlessly--- seriously, this takes skills. Often times switching POV is sort of discouraged because it can be confusing for the readers but in your story it works so well that I can't picture it being done any better. Each chapter feels like a photograph or a piece that is its own but adds depth to the story overall. Kinda like in those shows and movies when a detective has a wall of evidence and pictures with strings of yard drawing connections...

All I know is you have me hooked. Here is my recommendation and subscription!

I always love stories like these - the ones where the chapters are just short spurts of description or narration that say a lot in so few words. I've always wondered how people manage to achieve this, because I can use all the words in the world but the quality isn't there.

With this, however, the quality is definitely there.

I love the way the perspectives are constantly shifting and changing. It leaves the reader in suspense throughout the whole time, making you wonder if the person who discovered Rachel and the person who killed her are the same, after all, no matter the evidence that they are separate people.

Your writing is so crisp and clean, but provides the perfect amount of stress and edge to keep the attention of the reader and also keep the story going. It took me all of five minutes to read this, because I was so immediately drawn in and just could not look away.

I am so enamored with how dark and twisted this is, how your characters interact, and how you're managing to flesh out this plot with so few words. I hope to see more of this soon, because this is wonderful.

This is a great story! I love the range of perspectives that we are continuously given. Your description is fantastic and grammar near perfect (I spotted some minor errors towards the more recent chapters but nothing that isn't easy to make). I just really love the creepily realistic vibe of this story and appreciate the short length of the chapters very much as someone with a short attention span. Keep on keeping on!

Damn, almost a year passed and this story is still amazing!

Glad to see this story is still active.

Damn, this was good!!!!! I love the part at the end, very well written and builds the suspense!

I really like this so far! Everything from the layout to the short chapters to the characters! Your a great writer who is going for with this sorry! Please update again soon!

One thing I would like to see is a clear point of view change. At first I thought the main protagonist was the killer, but I wasn't until a few chapters later that I realized it was someone else. I can now tell who it is from what is happening in this story and how they are talking, but it being clearer would be awesome and much appreciated!

This story is simply beautiful. I love the short, choppiness of it. I love how each chapter starts and how it ends.

This is the type of story people rave about

Loved the simple layout! It was nice and clean compared any other layouts I've seen or made!

Straight up with the first chapter and the first line, I am hooked! "I was seventeen when I died." This has to be the most cunning line. Ever. And you ended it by releasing so so much worms!!!!

I think the simplicity of the scenes are so great and does this story so much justice. I love that even when it's so simple, I can imagine what is going on so so greatly!

I loved that he remains nameless~ there's more effect to the story, in a way.

Your writing is beautiful! I thought the first chapter being in Rachel's POV was genius!! It then went to the porch guy's thoughts~ I thought it was clever but I was slightly confused at first however, I caught on! Then it went to the killer's thoughts and my goodness, I hate how crazy and psychotic he is but it's perfect for this contest!

I was slightly confused by the beginning of this line, "I was took busy being horrified by my own mind that I didn't hear the sirens until they were right outside, and someone was banging on the door." I understood what was going on but the wording was off for me.

The fact that he became a suspect was predictable. But it's the way you wrote about it makes it freaking amazing.

BUT HE IS A SUSPECT AHHHH.
I wonder though, if he telling the truth.....

YO
YOOOO
but another crazy guy is involved and soooooo
I think his thoughts are the best it could get! He craves control and the the fact he's so confident of hiding is just so alluring. He's my favorite to read about even though it's sick.

I'm just wondering how she got in the woods
UGH VICTOR
Chapter 13 is my favorite chapter! Ooooh goodness. This is sick and just wrong. Mannnnnn I'm so invested in this.

Your writing is fantastic, the mysterious aspect here is shining brightly, and I believe your plot is brilliant! You did an amazing job! Nicely done!

THE SUMMARY SO IS CHILLING I'm very excited to read/judge this