June 16th, 2016 at 02:01am
Just from the summary, picture, and the title, I can already tell that something bad is going to happen to her, and while I don't want to keep reading to find out what happens, I have to keep reading because I need to know what happens to her. I DON'T WANT TO KNOW BUT I HAVE TO KNOW.
How dare he do something like that to her. What a selfish man. But in all seriousness, this was amazing. The chapters were so short, but each chapter had a lot of information about both of the characters. For a second there, I did think that nothing was going to happen to her... and then I looked at the banner in the layout. It was so... real, I guess. I mean, this could literally happen in real life (and I'm sure someone has done something like that) and the fact that he's been planing it for a long time is just so scary. He continued to lie to her and make her believe that he really loved her when that wasn't true. So sad. But so amazing.
I really liked how you started with the first few chapters showing how "happy" their relationship/marriage seemed, only to completely turn that on it's head in the last chapter. Like I said, I saw the ending coming because I knew the story was based off of the picture, but the way you write it wasn't super predictable or anything which I liked. It was also really realistic, something like this could (and I'm sure does) happen in real life, and that's kind of a scary though, really.
I thought you wrote this really well, great job!