A Hail of Bullets - Comments

@ maudaah
Oh thank you! I'm glad you liked it! :)

Hello! I'm here as a judge and the host for the contest you entered. First of all, I appreciate that you wrote this piece in the first person singular. It is easier for people to understand Vriska's opinion and relate to her. You portrayed her very nicely. Your description of Vriska makes you hate parts of her personnality which is very appropriate for a contest about sins. You see how she craves for money and you can feel some pity for her. Yet you go back to hating her when she talks about her sister's death. All the main character cares about is herself and her fortune. A part of me wanted her to escape the cops and succeed, though I'm kind of happy that she did get caught. Shows how much money isn't everything in life and that it can't save you from everything. Good Job on this piece :)