Somewhere Between Living and Dead - Comments

  • January Rose

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    Update please? Very Happy Wink Very Happy
    June 3rd, 2016 at 02:05am
  • January Rose

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    I just found this story and it is SO freaking good!!!! That intro chapter was beyond amazing, and I'm so freaking curious what is going to happen next! The next chapter was great, revealing so much about the characters in such a short time!
    You have to update this!!! I love it so much already!!! Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy
    April 2nd, 2016 at 06:32pm
  • dawn of light

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    This is so interesting! I love that we could understand the story through Sonja's point of view! It was a nice touch to let this lady have the main spot light.

    Your writing is so so clear! I felt like I was watching a scene from an investigation show and so I just know what you have in stored will be good.

    AND YOU ENDED THE FIRST CHAPTER WITH A KILLER (AYY) CLIFF HANGER. And it got me thinking of the story title and this plot you got going on~ YOU ARE A GENIUS, MY GOODNESS.

    yo ben has some explaining to do

    Ben got me working my brain on this serious issue! Where the hell was Sonja? What the hell happened to make her death rule as a suicide? I need Ben's side of this story! Where the hell was Sonja? omg what are you doing to me, Kara??? LOL.

    "I just got here myself." Just a small typo I found where it didn't start with an open quotation mark.

    Ben got me thinking again! Why the sudden cold shoulder and burst of irritation? BEN YOU GOT SOME EXPLAINING TO DO. Wait, what if he has something to do with Sonja's death?! I dislike Ben but I'm curious of his character. He has so many secrets and I just wanna know them all Weird

    "Not now, not ever." THIS LINE IS SO GREAT. SO MANY MEANINGS. I LOVE IT.

    I feel like you're rounding up your characters nicely because their personalities are showing seamlessly in these two chapters. I thought Ben was cold but then Sonja hit him with her words so wickedly, it made me question what she's capable of. OH WHAT IF THE WHOLE "DEATH" THING WAS A SETUP BY HER?!!!! my head is spinning for this story!!

    I'm actually in full swing for this to be updated. The moment I started reading, I just felt the need to read more! And I liked the way you titled your chapters. I thought it was clever and eye catching!

    You have the most unique layouts ever and they make me stare every time! I love the fact that it's arms and feet, and the underlying meaning behind the image is so chilling. Like always, nicely done, Kara!
    March 22nd, 2016 at 03:02am
  • pocahontas.

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    Take three! Let's see if this finally loads lmfao

    LAYOUT & SUMMARY

    Oooh In Love This is...dark. I love that there's a lot of white to make the layout easy on the eyes here, that doesn't take away from the eerie feeling given by the banner. The one-liner is perfect for a crime story, because it's reminiscent of the idea that one crime leads to another because one is never enough. Can you tell crime shows are my shit?

    CHAPTER 1

    With so few words you've managed to pain an entire scene right before my eyes. So much action can be inferred from the little you've given - like perhaps she drops her hand onto the table as she trails off. This is a really good example of using dialogue to one's advantage! Right away we are able to come to conclusions about Ben and make guesses about what happened to Sonja. Her questioning of Ben brings a certain heartbreak to life without using words like pain or sadness to describe how she feels; this is a skill I rather appreciate in an author.

    Though this is unedited, I personally didn't spot any mistakes.

    CHAPTER 2

    I like that this story isn't chronological so far. Ben failing to report Sonja missing shows that something was not right, but his anger at her inquiry also shows that something is off about him. It's like, paranoid much, Ben? The way Sonja speaks to him has me clapping. Just from this one short chapter I feel she's likely a very strong character. This is the perfect way to get the story started, in my opinion. Could totally see this as being a flashback for a show when a victim is being interviewed about what they remember.

    ‘I just got here myself.” - You're missing a quotation mark This chapter could use an edit because it seems some punctuation is missing or sentences could use some restructuring.

    OVERALL

    B R I L L I A N T job! I'm so pumped for this. It seems rather intentional that you do more telling than showing, and I love that. Your short paragraphs bring attention to what is being said by the characters which leaves a lot of room for readers to speculate on things. At this point in the story I can't tell if that's a good or bad thing, but Mibba seems rather fixated on every story needing to show things to the readers so I might recommend a little tweaking here and there depending on future chapters!

    You've just earned yourself a faithful reader because I cannot wait for the next chapter! Subscribed, recommended, and this will go along in my next blog.
    March 21st, 2016 at 12:27am
  • WhereMyDemonsHide

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    Really like this so far! Mr. Green Awesome work!
    March 12th, 2016 at 06:48am
  • dawn of light

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    Dance ready for this ahhh
    March 12th, 2016 at 03:11am