I really like the concept behind this story, there is so much that you could do with it and you have a solid start in place. I noticed a few errors as I read, but nothing that can't be fixed! The description is good and the telling of Fiona's background is just right, you haven't given too much away but you gave enough that as a reader I am curious! I'm not sure if this is being continued, but I'd love to see where this goes...!
June 13th, 2016 at 10:57am