There isn't much of a summary, but having read it all before hand, I think it oddly fits. I also love the minimalistic layout, since I think it matches the simplistic and sweet nature of the story itself.
Chapter One
Your writing is just so beautiful and captivating, without being overly descriptive or anything. Through rather simple and mundane things, you manage to describe the setting so beautifully, I can just imagine it right now. The writing itself makes me feel quite warm, similar to the way the sunlight acts like a warm duvet for him. I also like that we get these small snippets about the character, in such a short space of time.
I'm also interested to see what motivated him to get out of bed in the morning, and why this particular time and date is so important to him.
Chapter Two
I love the description of him wearing the suit. You can see this kind of small conflict between them and it works perfectly in your writing. It also gives us an even better idea of the character through these little quirks and the emotions they are feeling. You can almost tell this is entirely new to him because his hair is different and he bought new glasses just for the occasion, which also proves that he cares, a lot.
I love the way you portrayed his excitement as well. This story is super, super adorable so far. The faltering of the steps kind of shows who he really is, rather than the crisp black suit version, I think.
Chapter Three
The way you write is really emotive and I really like it. You're really good at kind of painting scenes, but not only showing us what the scenes look like, but what they feel like, too, as if I'm there sweltering in the heat with him. I love how dedicated he is to be there on time, to change his image completely all for this day.
You also portray the love he has for this girl really, really well. I can really see it in the way he looks back on his memories. Just the way he remembers the way her hand feels in his, how her nose crinkled and the way her eyes look. You show the adoration he has for her in your writing excellently! I just love how emotive your writing is as a whole, you've really shown it well.
Chapter Four
I really like the kind of nostalgic feel within this chapter, of him seeing all the people that have been there during their relationship, whether from the beginning or somewhere in the middle. Again, the emotions in this chapter were really well written, especially both the excitement and the anxiety intermingling with one another.
Martin's pacing is actually making me feel quite antsy for the wedding to begin. I think you've made him and his emotions really realistic and relatable for people, like it's easy to even just imagine the way he must be feeling right now. I also like the attention to time that has run throughout the whole story.
Chapter Five
You wrote the wedding scene absolutely perfectly. You captured all the atmosphere and emotions so well within this chapter and it was really, really sweet. The way you described the doors open to reveal light and then her was just fantastic, I absolutely loved it.
The way you described her was also so beautiful. There's something simplistic yet so elegant about the way you describe her, I can picture her very vividly. I like the use of body language, too, like with the shyness about her as she walks down the aisle to be married to Martin. And, of course, my favourite part of this chapter was easily the ending line: and he was reminded why he loved April, not just the month, but the person the most. You ended this chapter so well, probably my favourite line in the whole piece.
Chapter Six
The ending was SO sweet. The fact that they embrace and she's so filled with emotion on what is probably one of the most important and happiest days of her life. I'm just so happy for the couple and the fact they were each other's first loves make this whole thing even sweeter. The adoration they have for each other is so evident in things as simple as the body language and their reactions.
Really, really wonderful piece~
Overview
I really liked what you did with this trope! You really portrayed the love between the two characters well, and the fact that they're each other's first love and are married now is just wonderful. As I always say, I think the way you write is absolutely beautiful. It's not overly descriptive, but you use your descriptions so well in a way that perfectly captures the atmosphere and the emotions within the piece. I didn't spot any mistakes and I think you spaced this out really well. I also love that this took place over only a few hours! Wonderful entry~
Chapter One
Your writing is just so beautiful and captivating, without being overly descriptive or anything. Through rather simple and mundane things, you manage to describe the setting so beautifully, I can just imagine it right now. The writing itself makes me feel quite warm, similar to the way the sunlight acts like a warm duvet for him. I also like that we get these small snippets about the character, in such a short space of time.
I'm also interested to see what motivated him to get out of bed in the morning, and why this particular time and date is so important to him.
Chapter Two
I love the description of him wearing the suit. You can see this kind of small conflict between them and it works perfectly in your writing. It also gives us an even better idea of the character through these little quirks and the emotions they are feeling. You can almost tell this is entirely new to him because his hair is different and he bought new glasses just for the occasion, which also proves that he cares, a lot.
I love the way you portrayed his excitement as well. This story is super, super adorable so far. The faltering of the steps kind of shows who he really is, rather than the crisp black suit version, I think.
Chapter Three
The way you write is really emotive and I really like it. You're really good at kind of painting scenes, but not only showing us what the scenes look like, but what they feel like, too, as if I'm there sweltering in the heat with him. I love how dedicated he is to be there on time, to change his image completely all for this day.
You also portray the love he has for this girl really, really well. I can really see it in the way he looks back on his memories. Just the way he remembers the way her hand feels in his, how her nose crinkled and the way her eyes look. You show the adoration he has for her in your writing excellently! I just love how emotive your writing is as a whole, you've really shown it well.
Chapter Four
I really like the kind of nostalgic feel within this chapter, of him seeing all the people that have been there during their relationship, whether from the beginning or somewhere in the middle. Again, the emotions in this chapter were really well written, especially both the excitement and the anxiety intermingling with one another.
Martin's pacing is actually making me feel quite antsy for the wedding to begin. I think you've made him and his emotions really realistic and relatable for people, like it's easy to even just imagine the way he must be feeling right now. I also like the attention to time that has run throughout the whole story.
Chapter Five
You wrote the wedding scene absolutely perfectly. You captured all the atmosphere and emotions so well within this chapter and it was really, really sweet. The way you described the doors open to reveal light and then her was just fantastic, I absolutely loved it.
The way you described her was also so beautiful. There's something simplistic yet so elegant about the way you describe her, I can picture her very vividly. I like the use of body language, too, like with the shyness about her as she walks down the aisle to be married to Martin. And, of course, my favourite part of this chapter was easily the ending line: and he was reminded why he loved April, not just the month, but the person the most. You ended this chapter so well, probably my favourite line in the whole piece.
Chapter Six
The ending was SO sweet. The fact that they embrace and she's so filled with emotion on what is probably one of the most important and happiest days of her life. I'm just so happy for the couple and the fact they were each other's first loves make this whole thing even sweeter. The adoration they have for each other is so evident in things as simple as the body language and their reactions.
Really, really wonderful piece~
Overview
I really liked what you did with this trope! You really portrayed the love between the two characters well, and the fact that they're each other's first love and are married now is just wonderful. As I always say, I think the way you write is absolutely beautiful. It's not overly descriptive, but you use your descriptions so well in a way that perfectly captures the atmosphere and the emotions within the piece. I didn't spot any mistakes and I think you spaced this out really well. I also love that this took place over only a few hours! Wonderful entry~