The Moscow Files - Comments

Prologue
I love how your prologue is set up with the emails (and you showing Russian - is it, I'm pretty ignorant when it comes to other languages, my apologies - but I really love the way you set this up. It really drew me in!

Chapter One
I love the way you opened chapter one up! You describing that the powerdy stuff falling as snow, ash, or skin was so descriptive that it gave me shivers. I can't imagine living in a world like that and I already feel for Nastasya.

I'm wondering who Nastasya is waiting on to call her, and being confined in her own home must be so hard on her, especially the fact that she has no one to talk to. I'm wondering where her family/friends are, unless they were all enlisted into the war.

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“Ivanovic, you motherfucking bastard. I’ve been waiting for days.”

Tell him, girl!

Chapter Two
I loved the first paragraph in chapter two as well! You really know how to bring a reader in, and I love that about your writing. Also, just your imagery in general. ANYWAY, I really like the way you described Nastasya chewing him out.

Holy shit, Ilya seems really intense. I'm wondering how Anatoly is able to work with him when he's so monstrous. Of course, unless he absolutely has to. That would make sense.

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“So let her go herself. We’re not supposed to run hand-and-foot after our women; they’re supposed to do that for us. Women aren’t around for us to idolise, my friend. You’re doing this relationship thing all wrong.”

R00d

I like Ilya's sass, but he seems like a huge ass (heh, rhyming). I hope Nastasya isn't next, tbh.

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I'm really loving this so far! I know I've said that with literally all of your stories, but I speak the truth. Your writing is impeccable and just, so amazing and believable. As someone below said, you can tell that you've done your research. You know what you're talking about and that's another thing that makes your stories so amazing.

Ooo....... for just a summary, I was rapt. War time stories can be kinda tough (I know they intimidate me as an author) but I've got high hopes for this. I'm not sure where I thought it was going to go but I did not expect for 16yr old Nastasya to "take matters into her own hands". Her own teenaged hands! What is she going to do?? I wonder if she was born a bad ass or if we'll be able to see her character grow into one. I hope to see some really good combat scenes!
I guess I'll have to read to find out. Subscribed!

I'm a big fan of War stories and this is really good! It's well written and your description is vivid. You can tell that you've done research and that you've put a lot of effort into each chapter. Great job!

FRICKING I LOVE WIDE LAYOUTS + NICE SIZE FONTS. YES.

Prologue :: Fuck me if I don't love unconventional chapters. I love that you even went and changed the font, and wrote their email addresses in Cyrillic. I love the details of the attachments and how professional Anatoly sounds, and how brief and to-the-point this Ilya person is. I'm excited to meet them.

Chapter 1 :: Ugh I love when the first line of the first chapter is a hook.

There's something in this chapter that kind of reminds me of The Book Thief and 1984 (maybe not that one, I can't remember the name of the book, but some dystopian novel), which I thought was strengthened especially when you mentioned Nastasya watching from the Red Square. I like the casual way you write, which gets across a lot of accuracy and also story at the same time. I like the sentence near the end with not that she's counting.

OOOH, SHIT ANATOLY AND NASTASYA KNOW EACH OTHER. FRICKING YES DUDE I feel like Nastasya seems already like a strong female character and I love strong female characters.

Hello! Let me start by saying, oh em gee. Like wow. This story. Everything about it... just wow.
Firstly, the layout is lovely, I like the font the title is in (by the way what is it? I want it for myself haha). The colors are very soft, its really gentle considering the nature of the story.
Second, the summary is great. It explains everything yet doesn't give too much away. Its honestly one of the best summaries I've seen on Mibba, I would expect to see this quality on the back of a novel.
Now, for the content of the story.
I like the emails in the first chapter, how everything but the content is in Russian. I'm surprised Mibba supports the characters actually. I have to pull nails for it to recognized the amp sign let alone Russian.
The second chapter, is lovely as well. Your sentences flow so well and your grammar is impeccable. Where she speaks about how the stuff falling from the sky could be vaporized humans speaks to the state of the world during this war.
I'm so glad I chose this story to read and I now have another story to eagerly await an update for.

HAHAHA this is why you may potentially be on Scotland's radar for googling Putin It def looks worth it, I'm so excited!

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This is so entrancing and unique. What a great start to the story. I can't wait to read more and delve further into this world with Nastasya :) Well done!