So your summary got me so pumped for this entry as a whole because that line where she's like, “friends don't look at each other like that,” IS JUST SO BEAUTIFUL. And I relate to it on so many levels.
I really did feel like I was in this drabble because how you kept things nameless. Along with that, I relate to this line, “...the way her eyes couldn’t rest on anything from more than a few seconds before they flicked away…” almost too perfectly that I’m just. In awe and amusement based on the perfection this line gives. The last paragraph was just perfect. It's nicely structured and full of beauty. And I love that you ended it with that because you leave us readers with such curiosity of those two characters. I want them to be together but I liked that they aren't, if that makes sense. He's having heavy feelings but telling it in a light way, and so I really really like how you portrayed that. WHAT IF HE SAID SOMETHING AND THEY ENDED UP TOGETHER? Oh damn I want them to be together sm.
I liked two specific things about this. One, how relatable this drabble was. Not many drabbles can do this--touch the readers--but you do it so effortly. And two, the focus. Your writing is like a camera to me. You're so great at focusing on a certain scene / action similar to how a camera would blur out the background and just focus on the important stuff. I really like that. Overall, I loved the feeling you delivered in this drabble--it’s powerful and emotional. Fantastic entry!
So your summary got me so pumped for this entry as a whole because that line where she's like, “friends don't look at each other like that,” IS JUST SO BEAUTIFUL. And I relate to it on so many levels.
I really did feel like I was in this drabble because how you kept things nameless. Along with that, I relate to this line, “...the way her eyes couldn’t rest on anything from more than a few seconds before they flicked away…” almost too perfectly that I’m just. In awe and amusement based on the perfection this line gives. The last paragraph was just perfect. It's nicely structured and full of beauty. And I love that you ended it with that because you leave us readers with such curiosity of those two characters. I want them to be together but I liked that they aren't, if that makes sense. He's having heavy feelings but telling it in a light way, and so I really really like how you portrayed that. WHAT IF HE SAID SOMETHING AND THEY ENDED UP TOGETHER? Oh damn I want them to be together sm.
I liked two specific things about this. One, how relatable this drabble was. Not many drabbles can do this--touch the readers--but you do it so effortly. And two, the focus. Your writing is like a camera to me. You're so great at focusing on a certain scene / action similar to how a camera would blur out the background and just focus on the important stuff. I really like that. Overall, I loved the feeling you delivered in this drabble--it’s powerful and emotional. Fantastic entry!