Your layout is gorgeous! I know some people tend to not like animated gifs in story layouts. but I, however, think it looks amazing. The movement is subtle which fits well.
As for the writing itself, you're very talented. This flows very smoothly, and your opening line for the first chapter pulled me right in. I like how Paris asks him to bet on whether he'll get with Jaelyn or not. It feels very fitting to the kind of lifestyle Jared is in, but what I like even more is that he doesn't bet on it. Show's he's got some decency, thus far. I'm curious to see where this will go! It's wonderful so far! Great work!
As for the writing itself, you're very talented. This flows very smoothly, and your opening line for the first chapter pulled me right in. I like how Paris asks him to bet on whether he'll get with Jaelyn or not. It feels very fitting to the kind of lifestyle Jared is in, but what I like even more is that he doesn't bet on it. Show's he's got some decency, thus far. I'm curious to see where this will go! It's wonderful so far! Great work!