I love this. Just, it's real and cute and just good.
Also, double-check the pronouns at the time jump when Declan and his sister get in the car. It's in first person, which I figure you wrote it that way first before changing it. I like the third person though. You write it very smoothly, which is not an easy task in my opinion.
Also, double-check the pronouns at the time jump when Declan and his sister get in the car. It's in first person, which I figure you wrote it that way first before changing it. I like the third person though. You write it very smoothly, which is not an easy task in my opinion.