May 26th, 2017 at 11:48pm
Your take on a crush was interesting. You gave me this insight of both sad and happy feelings someone may experience when they’re crushing, which was something I really liked. The constant second guessing she does made me slightly sad. I know the feeling and it’s just not great. Then you added in something to reassure the readers–“She still can’t believe that he picked her”, which was of course nice to read about because we get a sense of the opposite feelings. This line especially stood out to me because it’s sort of balances out her situation and feelings towards her boyfriend, which was nice. I did enjoy how consistent your writing was–being that you wrote things through a simplistic manner.
A couple things I enjoyed about this: Your style. Because you tangle words together and make it shiny in the end. Your character’s voice. Because it was without a doubt relatable and smooth. Your last line. Because it was packed with emotion and basically tied the entire thing nicely. Overall, I thought your entry was delightful~ wonderful job!
i think your take on love that's really developed in a relationship is very interesting. i'm a much more serious person, so reading something like this makes me nauseous in that lovey-dovey type of way, lol. but ik what that feels like; that giddy little feeling that other people are really good @ portraying even in developed relationships. this was a cute read!