Nanih Waiya - Comments

First off, the layout. I love that pastel green. Your layout is simple and beautiful, so props to Sam. However, the perfectionist in me wishes that there were colors from the picture of the moon and Nanih Waiya (at least, that's what I'm assuming it is) were used in the layout. The blues in the image are kind-of throwing me for a loop with the green and grey-ish colors going on in the rest of the layout. I'd say not use it, but if the mound in the picture is Nanih Waiya then it's relevant to the story - and I'm only suggesting that you remove it because aesthetic-wise it's not really needed... and I do love that green.

Second, I really enjoyed the song you linked. It, like the layout, is beautiful and simple and I'm all, "Why haven't I stumbled across this before?" But the song also has this tragic element to it that just makes it so wonderful.

Now, onto the text. It too is beautiful, simple, and really intrigues me. I think you do a wonderful job of setting up the story. There are only a couple things I think you should change (which you don't have to, they're only suggestions). The first is change "floor" to ground in, "Surely a hole in the floor didn't create mankind." Secondly, the last sentence left me a little confused - and not and maybe not in the bad way, depending on how you intended it. So is Nahih Waiya not actually a mound? Is the entire world a different world from our world? I'd just like this to be clarified a bit more, unless it's purposefully done to make the reader ask these questions. In that case, don't change it.

Altogether, I love it. I can't wait to read this. I'm definitely subscribing and recommending!

im totally in love w/ the beauty of your layout as well as your summary. it's, as alex moore said, soothing & totally calming. not to mention how excited i am of the story in itself!

This is for the comment swap!

first of; I do like to judge a book by its cover, its that the eye needs something too you know? And I must say I very much like this one. Its calm and soothing for the eye. very aesthetic!

Since I just read this is not for a commentswap, I am going to leave it with this haha