September 7th, 2016 at 04:43pm
This story is just everything I need in life at the moment, seriously. You've got this wonderful mix of two totally different characters and seeing life from both of their perspectives makes me so excited. I can't wait to see what life will actually be like for Sylar and Jasper. They're just such different souls that I legitimately want to see how they work together because I am totally all for that opposites life.
Once again, your writing is so realistic and wonderful that it pulls me right into the story alongside the pair. All of the little details -- from the crying-room-mate-family situation seen from both sides down to the nonchalant attitude that Jasper seems to have -- just make this all the better for reading. There's literally what, three chapters, and I'm already feeling like I know these two well. You have this knack for writing characters that the reader instantly becomes invested in, which in a story like this one is totally a massive bonus. I wanna know moooooooorrrreee.
I can't get enough of your writing though, seriously. You write in such a simple, wonderful way that totally leaves me envious. Your description seems to do so much more than I can do in a million words, and you totally convey what you want to say really well. Totally subbing and hoping for more soon because yeah, I dig this on a major level.
but also you're killing me 
(CAUSE THIS IS LIKE EVERYTHING I NEED IN LIFE AND I NEED MORE OKAY) 
I like the lighthearted nature of this story. I like how easy it is to read and how naturally it flows and I especially love that in the second chapter, Jasper’s literally about to get laid and then his Sylar’s parents walk in. I snorted then because LOL that is awkward as hell. I’ll admit it took me until the second chapter to understand Sylar’s parents, I hadn’t realised they didn’t approve of gay men but that’s more on me being slow and less of you making it obvious, which I think it wasn’t necessary for you to make obvious because Sylar’s mum made enough sly comments for the readers to understand.
Aw. I feel kind of bad for Sylar because all he wants to do is get to know his roomie but there Jasper goes, disappearing like a madman. The romantic in me hopes Jasper disappears because he’s gained a mad crush on Sylar, but that’s me doing some damn wishful thinking. AW JASPER. HE JUST WANTS SOME AFFECTION but Keegan won’t give that to him. I suspect Keegan’s around just for play and not for anything deeper, which makes me a little sad because Jasper has grown on me. I don’t like the way he just randomly disappears but I do like that he’s got a bit of sass going on, which I think mirrors Sylar’s shy one nicely. I like the way you’ve written the characters, you’ve shown their personalities in a way that’s easy to differentiate who is who without having to see whose POV it is. I think you pull off writing in a male perspective well too, which I think (in my experience) is hard to do so KUDOS.
Overall, I like this story so far. Like I mentioned earlier, it’s an easy read, it’s fun and lighthearted, it’s a cute ass story with Sam written all over it. The one criticism I have though is that so far, it doesn’t really have any connection to the poem. I suspect we’ll be seeing this in later chapters and I can kind of guess the direction that this story may take, but as of right now I don’t see anything besides what I’ve read in the summary. OH and I'm also subbing because I'm so down for this you don't even know. Thanks for entering!