I really like the pink accents in the layout and the gray border. Very cute. Draws a lot of attention to the header. The summary goes with your song choice very well and it's interesting and gives insight to your work without giving it all away.
Hot Sauce
The tone and flow follows the theme of Lemonade very well. I like how you put your own spin on it yet added " Where do you go when you go quiet?" ahh so good. Visuals and descriptions are also very spot on and amazing. It's clear that Sam is not there and Callum is suspicious and frustrated. So much so he picks up a wrong condiment to be spiteful. Which is real since when couples get frustrated, petty things become big things.
I can just see everything. Even though there isn't much detail on what the characters look likeI can see Sam's face and vision the moment in which he tells Calum that there is someone else and can just see that being taken place in like a supermarket parking lot. And just how it's so simple but so painful. Amazing.
Your Love, Your Pride, Your Darkness
The thought process and narrative Callum has is super real. And vivid. The wanting to see Sam be hurt in the way Callum is hurt is nicely written in such a short way. Him taking the keys and driving away is a nice touch, too. Having all that intense, strong emotion and dealing with it all in such a short frame is so good.
"I stare straight ahead and I curb my instinct to crush you. Two hit-and-runs."
Such a good line.
Pure Diamond
Even though Callum left Sam in such a rage, the fact he's been counting every single day without him. Which is such a nice touch with the grand scheme of Lemonade.
"they become as familiar to you as your own palm-lines. "
Very accurate and it just adds to the characterization that they were in a relationship with each other for so long and even though Sam messed up, the connect and history between them can't be erased.
This in all is like the processing to forgiveness chapter which is really pivotal to the plot and how this story connects to the song and it was written very well. I like how through the whole story I can connect to Callum and understand his emotional thought process about it all.
I can't tell if the break/cut off of the last sentence is intentional.
My Salvation, My Redemption, My Remedy
I just really like the simplicity of it all. He just comes in on the 98th day and says sorry and the space between them is closed again and Callum still has objections about it by thinking it's too late but has longed for Sam for so long.
And I love how you just tie it all together with "Oh how I missed you, my love."
All in all, this is amazing. Sorry, I'm a piece of shit. This was extraordinary on all levels. Love it!
Layout/Summary
I really like the pink accents in the layout and the gray border. Very cute. Draws a lot of attention to the header. The summary goes with your song choice very well and it's interesting and gives insight to your work without giving it all away.
Hot Sauce
The tone and flow follows the theme of Lemonade very well. I like how you put your own spin on it yet added " Where do you go when you go quiet?" ahh so good. Visuals and descriptions are also very spot on and amazing. It's clear that Sam is not there and Callum is suspicious and frustrated. So much so he picks up a wrong condiment to be spiteful. Which is real since when couples get frustrated, petty things become big things.
I can just see everything. Even though there isn't much detail on what the characters look likeI can see Sam's face and vision the moment in which he tells Calum that there is someone else and can just see that being taken place in like a supermarket parking lot. And just how it's so simple but so painful. Amazing.
Your Love, Your Pride, Your Darkness
The thought process and narrative Callum has is super real. And vivid. The wanting to see Sam be hurt in the way Callum is hurt is nicely written in such a short way. Him taking the keys and driving away is a nice touch, too. Having all that intense, strong emotion and dealing with it all in such a short frame is so good.
"I stare straight ahead and I curb my instinct to crush you. Two hit-and-runs."
Such a good line.
Pure Diamond
Even though Callum left Sam in such a rage, the fact he's been counting every single day without him. Which is such a nice touch with the grand scheme of Lemonade.
"they become as familiar to you as your own palm-lines. "
Very accurate and it just adds to the characterization that they were in a relationship with each other for so long and even though Sam messed up, the connect and history between them can't be erased.
This in all is like the processing to forgiveness chapter which is really pivotal to the plot and how this story connects to the song and it was written very well. I like how through the whole story I can connect to Callum and understand his emotional thought process about it all.
I can't tell if the break/cut off of the last sentence is intentional.
My Salvation, My Redemption, My Remedy
I just really like the simplicity of it all. He just comes in on the 98th day and says sorry and the space between them is closed again and Callum still has objections about it by thinking it's too late but has longed for Sam for so long.
And I love how you just tie it all together with "Oh how I missed you, my love."
All in all, this is amazing. Sorry, I'm a piece of shit. This was extraordinary on all levels. Love it!