A million times sorry for the really really late comment
There's a lot of things I liked about this entry. I have to mention the level of mystery you nicely incorporated into this. Each chapter had it's only little side story, if that that makes sense, and I really liked that.
I have to be honest and say the first couple chapters were slightly confusing for me. I thought the first five chapters were a bit dry because it seemed redundant. Though, it all started to come together as I read on. And when it did you really knew how to play with it.
The course of your plot seemed straightforward while being remotely smooth. Another thing I really liked was how you made the readers feel Amara’s personality. By the way you conveyed her tone, I really did feel for her. At some parts, I effortlessly imagined her facial expressions and even her own thoughts.
Some parts did freak me out
The chapter where she says, “You can't hurt me,” three times had a nice flare to it. The repetition of that line made me nervous. And cold. LOL. The chapter after it where they say, “Oh, but I can,” just. JUST MADE ME EVEN MORE NERVOUS. HAHA.
I liked how well you easily created this insane character. The nature of this entire entry was amazingly captivating. I also dig your layout so much. It's as beautiful as ever. Great job on this!
There's a lot of things I liked about this entry. I have to mention the level of mystery you nicely incorporated into this. Each chapter had it's only little side story, if that that makes sense, and I really liked that.
I have to be honest and say the first couple chapters were slightly confusing for me. I thought the first five chapters were a bit dry because it seemed redundant. Though, it all started to come together as I read on. And when it did you really knew how to play with it.
The course of your plot seemed straightforward while being remotely smooth. Another thing I really liked was how you made the readers feel Amara’s personality. By the way you conveyed her tone, I really did feel for her. At some parts, I effortlessly imagined her facial expressions and even her own thoughts.
Some parts did freak me out
The chapter where she says, “You can't hurt me,” three times had a nice flare to it. The repetition of that line made me nervous. And cold. LOL. The chapter after it where they say, “Oh, but I can,” just. JUST MADE ME EVEN MORE NERVOUS. HAHA.
I liked how well you easily created this insane character. The nature of this entire entry was amazingly captivating. I also dig your layout so much. It's as beautiful as ever. Great job on this!