Beaches - Comments

i completely agree w/ little tea-pot. im normally a fan of short chapters & what not, but it really depends on the author's writing style which sometimes doesn't adhere to my liking. but as opposed to this piece that i read through a million times...jesus, i'm slightly waiting to find this on the shelf of a bookstore when i get back to the states.

every little word that comes together is a word that adjusts tightly around my heart & makes me feel that gut-wrenching feeling for the loss of the old days where innocence ran rampant in our veins.

this is so beautifully crafted, i have no other words.

Usually, I'm a bit iffy about stories with short chapters but somehow, yours really catches my attention.

Every word, every sentence packs a punch and you don't waste words (if that's even a thing). Your imagery and the way you describe things. I especially love the second chapter where you describe memories having its own colors. And as I keep reading each chapter, I just can't wait to read more and more. You are an amazing author because you're able to make me feel so attached to a story with so few words.

And the last chapter. Just a simple forgive me but somehow I can feel the sorrow the persona is feeling for losing him. Everything just ties together perfectly and I honestly can't find flaws in this story at all!

Kudos to you!