February 27th, 2017 at 07:04am
I love that this entry is focusing on three people. I liked that even though the scenes were quick, the readers really got a sense of who’s here. I really liked how Elena and Demetrius were totally different people. From the way they answered to the way the tone just crosses towards us nicely. You did that effortlessly. AND YOUR TWIST AT THE END. okay, when I first read it, I didn’t see that coming. But wow. The build up itself was a shocker and nicely written. WOW
I also liked how you didn’t stray away from the twist itself. You didn’t try to leave forced clues throughout the first chapter. Brilliant!
I love the way you wrote this because it’s somewhat cometic, despite being a crime entry. I say that only about certain parts during the interrogation
You know how to individually showcase these characters with the wit and the whole fuck you persona. You didn’t over do it, and so the conversation didn’t feel forced.I am really digging this layout
it’s 100% sick Great job!!!! 
This was so well done. I had a feeling something wasn't what it seemed. Demetri and Elena had a great back and forth. I liked how Dr. Chen handled everything. And the overall style of this was fantastic.
I'm actually doing a class research project on DID too, and I honestly feel like you did an amazing job. (I just went and looked at how you placed in the contest and I'm glad you won!)
Seriously though, that's it? I'd love to see more of this.