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  • villa rosie

    villa rosie (100)

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    Ghoul of 2016
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    @ dawn of light
    Your entire comment is so special to me; I can't thank you enough for the kind words and compliments! Arms
    There are plenty of elements you talked about, from my story, that I didn't even think held such an impact. It changes my perspective on it all, and that is really wicked cool, haha! Cute

    But seriously, I could read your comment every day because it is so thoughtful and brightens my mood! thank you-thank you-thank you!! In Love
    August 12th, 2016 at 07:02am
  • dawn of light

    dawn of light (100)

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    This entire thing was beautiful. You go back and forth with emotion and telling the story, and I realized that it fits. It's balanced with all these different elements. The first chapter was fantastic, and it happens to be my favorite chapter. Everything about it was perfect because it's simple and it gave me chills. This line, “...it seems the cushions are molding to your physique evermore,” was 100% majestic. The tone in that line made me reread it more than once because I was in awe. This chapter as a whole made me curious of who the mc is talking about.

    The second chapter was just as beautiful. Your writing gives me this sensation of happiness, really. You wrote, “To be with the light and not expelled into the dark,” and I just couldn't believe how breathtaking this line was. It can be interpreted into so many other meanings and I can't even start to think of those others.

    Chapter three is where I notice that the tone changed, and I just love what / how you did with that. There's a small shift and you play with it nicely. This line, “There is a fluster to overwhelm me…” makes me love this story even more. I love that line because you took, “I have this feeling that I like you,” to a whole new, beautiful level. My goodness. In Love

    I think you did really well with the last chapter. Everything about it satisfies the readers. You mention the heart breaking and restoring and I just LOVE that you did that because that is a crush. That is the meaning of a crush.

    The tone in this is fantastic. Because your writing touched the readers, I felt like the simplicity of this really pulled your story together. It was short, sweet, and everything this contest was made for. Wonderful entry!
    August 9th, 2016 at 02:42am