Carved in Crimson - Comments

I'd tell how much I like the story but \/ that person already did

this story is downright amazing. the first chapter is just heartbreaking; amy is so excited when she sees been tagged by someone on such a high horse, her mind racing with all the things she can do to better her outer self and her happiness is just so real and sweet and then you see that just nasty post. my heart absolutely shattered for her. it's so sad to see what they can do to her and the final few lines just. ugh.

then chapter two. "We wouldn't want anyone to be left out, now would we?" DAMN. shit escalated in a millisecond. hallie is just an asshole; i couldn't bring myself to feel bad for her for even a brief moment. perhaps the other girls, because the situation they're in is horrifying, but hallie...ah, no.

the moment i realized that it wasn't amy legitmitely shocked me. there was one moment before that reveal that had me thinking (the small paragraph that noted that the girls were young and only on the edge of womanhood) but i wasn't sure, so i was still genuinely and pleasantly surprised.

HALLIE IS SUCH AN ASS. GOD. GOD. she just pisses me off so much. i can see how people fall beneath her - i can just imagine her cruelty causing people that are too afraid to fight her for fear of their lives being pissed on to blindly follow her - and i absolutely hate it.

oh my goodness, the torture she lays upon those girls is horrible. that is so not the way you deal with things, but god does it make for a good story. i'm so conflicted about it because on one hand i'm like YES and on the other i'm like NO.

"You're the kind of mother I wish I had." damn. that's. that's something, and really quite telling. i love it.

OH CHAPTER THREE. my heart was actually quite warm when i realized who it was that was telling me the story at that point. it was honestly quite sweet, seeing amy's mother taking in hannah and giving her a chance for a loving maternal influence. it made me smile, especially after the whirlwind that was chapters one and two.

i agree. hallie had nothing beautiful left. she was utterly disgusting.

AW SHE MADE UP A POEM FOR HER BABY. THAT'S ADORABLE.

i really love the way you ended this, and really, the whole thing in general. this was a ride from start to finish and very entertaining. you did amazingly!