Fly on the Wall. - Comments

The summary pulled me in right away. It was poetic in a way how you wrote it.
The first chapter was very interesting. Very well written. I didn't find any grammar or spelling errors. I'm excited to see where this goes.

i really like the summary. & i absolutely adore thousand foot krutch though i haven't heard them in forever sooo thanks for those feels!!!!!

you start off "the introduction" in a very powerful manner. the 'cry of outrage' is something we all can relate to as of the '16 election. i hated both those candidates, so no matter what the outcome was i'd have shit bricks. buuuuuut, honestly, i remember the shock of that landslide. '-the rest of the country wait in fear'

i like how the first two chapters in italics leading after the great election is doused in a fear that we can all relate to. a person in our lives held onto that fear if we didn't & it incited pure fear into the hearts of those - like me. so i can absolutely feel the ball drop in deana's stomach as she does what she has to do for her mother & her sister.

this is very intriguing. good luck w/ this story. you seriously have an amazing start

I really loved the intro!

I really loved the intro!

I really loved the intro!

I really loved the intro!

I am interested to know how this is going to play out. The first chapter was very intriguing and it definitely got my attention. It helps that the male character's image is one of Stephen Amell, and I personally adore him. I think he is a great soul with many expectations to help others, and he is a hottie! I personally do not like politics, but this is very intriguing. In the introduction alone, tension rose. Love the layout and the banner! Can't wait to see where this goes.

Quote

Remember, not everything is what it seems.
If you don't stand for something, You might fall for anything.

This particular quote warmed my soul, and made me think of everything that relates to people fighting for what they believe in, even if it took not only time, but also confidence in doing so.
You have a great writing style, and I am sure this is going to be awesome.