So far, I'm in love with this. The first paragraph really pulled me in. I thought your descriptions of the world from Finn's point of view were really nicely done - especially the way he perceives/describes time. I also really liked your descriptions in general - like how you described Natalie's look so simply, but you still created a pretty clear image of her and the type of person she might be.
Even though it's just one chapter in, I feel like I learned a lot about Finn and Natalie without being overwhelmed by too much details or feeling bored. I think you struck a perfect balance between sharing info about the present and revealing a litlte about the characters' past. Finn being so enamored with Natalie already is very cute, but I loved that you also hinted that Finn's been removed from society (human and mermaid) for a while so that might be why he's so attracted to her so quickly. I think that fact gives a lot more depth to his developing feelings.
Anyway, I'm ready to read more - subscribed and rec'd!
Heyo! I really like this layout, I like it when the theme matches the story. I really enjoyed the first chapter. I thought it would be a little cheesy because it's a mermaid/man story, but it actually wasn't, it's tasteful. I really liked it and look forward to reading more. I'm curious about the merman's backstory, can't wait for you to go into more detail about that. I'm interested in reading about their first encounter and how their relationship develops. And also how other characters are going to react to their relationship and the discovery that merpeople are real. Can't wait for the next update, nice start!