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  • Nereid

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    @ aliens.
    Thank you for this super sweet comment! I'm really glad you're enjoying the read <3
    November 22nd, 2017 at 03:06pm
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    Peace Lily
    I really thought this was a great introduction to the character! You can tell she really loves her plants if she's reciting them by heart. Not only that, but I feel sorry for her having to deal with her older brother being like a parent to her and trying to force her to do things she doesn't want to. Once again, I think this story is super realistic already and I like what you've got so far!

    African Violets
    God, like I said, I love how real this is. You're capturing depression so well as someone that knows they still have work to do and once they get it done, it's right back into bed. I relate so hard tbh.

    Weeping Figs
    I feel so bad for Kat with her brother not understanding what it's like to live with depression. It's so upsetting to me and I truly hope he starts to be more understanding as the story progresses.

    Aloe Vera
    I'm really loving the conversation she had with her therapist and her snapping and everything. I think it shows just how done she is, and it seems like she's not really willing to help herself at this point. I hope that changes.

    Fishtail Palm
    Wow. I'm not very fond of her therapist just because most take their time with patients telling them things. At least, that's how my experience has been, I'm not sure how it is with others.

    Chinese Evergreen
    Part of me is wondering what happened in those unrecorded months to trigger everything, but I feel for Kat so much that I'm not sure I want to know what happened. It was really sweet of Xander to say he was proud of her, though. You can really tell it caught her off-guard.

    Heart Leaf
    I'm really wondering if James was the reason for her dark days. It would make sense since she said he haunted her nightmares tbh, but then again, I'm not sure.

    Rachel seemed nice and it's a shame Kat not only treated her the way she did, but also spit the pills out.

    Snake Plant
    Part of me wishes Xander would've been a little more harsh on her in this case and called out her lies, but the other part of me is kinda glad he didn't because it might've worsened Kat's already fragile state.

    I'm really, really enjoying this and I'm definitely going to keep reading! You're doing so well at this and I'm so in love. Great job!
    November 20th, 2017 at 05:56am
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    @ PhenoBarbiDoll
    The fact that someone actually stayed up late to read my story makes me feel so happy! Especially since I have done that way too many times myself.

    I feel like there are some inconsistency with my earlier chapters, so I'm glad that you still enjoyed reading this :) Thank you so much for your lovely comment. I'm glad you like the family relationship too since I really wanted to make that bond feel natural.

    Thank you so so so much for your comment, and trust me, your comment was lovely and made me smile so you do not suck at commenting what so ever :D

    Oh, and thank you for the recommendation too!!!
    October 26th, 2017 at 09:25pm
  • PhenoBarbiDoll

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    I realized that I stayed up late reading this a while back and never commented. Whoops!

    I love this. I was drawn in with the first few chapters and now I'm hooked. I do like the writing style, and I appreciate the shorter chapters that move the story forward pretty rapidly without leaving any gaps. I feel like I know her story (or at least what is meant to be revealed so far), and so where she is now and what she's doing in her sessions makes sense.

    I also like the progression for her. It's realistic. She doesn't just magically get better without faltering, but she is making strides in the right direction. I love her relationship with her brother...he sounds a lot like my brother.

    Anyway, I've rambled on. Lol. Just wanted you to know I'm reading and I love it and I'm sorry I suck at commenting. Mr. Green
    October 26th, 2017 at 08:52pm
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    @ silk tea.
    Thank you so much! This is such a sweet comment and I'm so thankful. Thank you so much and I am really happy my style of writing is giving across the message I am wanting it to.
    September 11th, 2017 at 02:57pm
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    I love this. I love that the writing style is so simple and yet it has that sort of tone that draws you in. It's short and concise but still manages to draw things out for you. I've read only the first four chapters but I'm definitely going to be subscribing. It sounds like I'm reading my own life in a way. I share a lot of similarities with Kat so it really resonates with me in that way. Definitely great so far. :)
    September 10th, 2017 at 05:03am
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    @ Kim Taehyung
    I'm the same! I have tons of flowers in my bedroom and kitchen
    August 21st, 2017 at 06:12pm
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    I really love flowers, I take photos of all the flowers I see haha :p
    August 21st, 2017 at 03:20pm
  • Nereid

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    @ Kim Taehyung
    Thank you! I'm really happy all of the themes in my story came across so well to you, especially the connection to flowers. Seeing you say that you find it poetic without romanticising mental illness is amazing too since I really did not want to make mental illness seem that way at all, especially since it's something so many people struggle with. Thank you again!
    August 21st, 2017 at 02:37pm
  • Sansa Stark

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    This story really got me. At first, I was expecting something bright and bubbly, based on the layout and the flower theme you got going on but it quickly took a turn that left me speechless. The fact that the chapters are so short and you prefer simple words and to the point sentences helps swallow all the emotion you put into your writing. It is all very poetic but without romanticising mental illness. The relationship between Kat and Xander is very believable and sweet and I love how everything seems to be connected with flowers. Very good job! <3
    August 21st, 2017 at 10:07am
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    @ exploding boy.

    I hadn't wrote anything on this story for three weeks and I saw this comment today when I was having a study break and needed to distract myself with reading on mibba. Thank you so much for this incredible comment, it really made me realise that I need to take time to do stuff I enjoy and begin writing again.

    I'm just overwhelmed with the amazingly positive comments I've gotten on this story. I really did not expect this much love for my work, so thank you so so so very much for this amazing comment <3
    February 20th, 2017 at 09:59pm
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    @ colour me perfect.

    Hey, don't worry about it! It's taken me two weeks to reply because my life is a hectic mess too. Thank you so much for this beautiful comment. I'm so happy that the way I want the story to come across is really being picked up on, it makes me so happy seeing my work pay off. I do need to go back and make some changes as I think I've made a couple of grammatical errors here and there, but thank you for picking up on them so I know what I need to look out for! Thank you so much for this comment and for the subscription <3
    February 20th, 2017 at 09:55pm
  • nearly witches.

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    I think I echo a lot of people when I say that there's a strong emotional tie between the reader and the narrator. especially when it comes to things such as mental illness and the suchlike. The way that you keep the characterisation going throughout also makes this so much easier. You describe Kat so effortlessly that it almost feels like we're learning about her between the lines, and it's a really good way to keep the story going on. There's nothing that feels unnatural or jilted about the narration -- it just flows so simply, and it's a real joy to read as the chapters go on. You've got this wonderful metaphor running throughout as well in terms of plants and Kat likening herself to one, and I think that just ties the whole thing together perfectly.

    Like Kat, I'm really into gardening and the bit in the second chapter about never having too many plants was probably where I made the real connection with this story. There's just something calming about gardening, and you've captured that perfectly within Kat's dreamlike personality. She's forgetful, she's shy, she's so gentle in her actions as well. I feel like I connect with her a lot, because I share a lot of the same traits as she does, so that really got me hooked in.

    I like the way in which this starts out light and airy, but gets heavier as it goes along as well. I think it's very indicative of mental illness -- you can be absolutely fine one minute and hit rock bottom the next without any rhyme nor reason. I agree with colour me perfect. -- it's refreshing to see a story where mental illness is portrayed in a realistic way. It isn't glamourised at all, and I see it as a realistic portrayal. Kat's such a multi-faceted character and it's so intriguing to read about her development as the chapters go on.

    You've got this wonderfully poetic way of writing, and I'm really excited to see where this goes.
    February 19th, 2017 at 08:57pm
  • colour me perfect.

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    Hey look, it's that girl that intended to read this a WEEK ago. Facepalm I am so sorry. My life is all over the place!
    Anyway, as I figured you would, you've carried on the metaphor brilliantly. The way you use 'light' and 'darkness', along with the imagery of being 'watered' -- even literally, in that latest chapter, is fantastic. It makes me even happier that the title represents the overarching metaphor. People can sometimes lose sight of such a thing, and it's great that you haven't.
    I'm going to take a wild guess and say that in the current pov at least, some of the presentation of her anti-social disorder is influenced by some form of trauma. Her emotions are all over the place, and whilst she's very obviously ambivalent to most other people, I feel as though her new carer, along with her brother, may affect her in some way. Maybe that's just wishful thinking, but she seems more... complex, I guess.
    I love that you cut between the flashbacks and the current point of view without fading into memories or relying on dialogue to inform the reader of the past. It adds mystery and also allows me to pick up the subtle differences between both versions of Kat. The resignation she has towards life is so intriguing, and so well written. I love stories involving mental illnesses, but it can be a huge bummer when they're not portrayed in the most realistic way. This isn't like that. I can tell that there's so much more to her; that you're letting it unravel crumb by crumb.
    So yes... this is wonderful. I'm so looking forward to finding out the rest. This simplicity of your writing style is beautiful and perfect for Kat. You've written about an extremely complex character in a way that makes sense, and you should be really, really proud of this story! The only fault I picked up was occasionally with your dialogue, where you use a full stop instead of a comma before the closing punctuation marks. That's so easy to do, though! But yeah... brilliant job, and I will be subscribing! Cute
    February 7th, 2017 at 11:29am
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    @ AJDWriter
    Thank you soooo much for this comment! I really poured my experience with mental health issues into this story, and although I do not share the same illness as Kat displays I think it's really helped me bring Kat to life and create that realistic story.

    Thank you for pointing that out! I sorted it now :)
    February 1st, 2017 at 11:46am
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    @ loveismyweapon.
    Thank you so very much for that lovely comment! I think that is one of the favourite lines I've ever wrote so I love that you noticed it :3
    February 1st, 2017 at 11:31am
  • AJDWriter

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    I'm normally not drawn to original fictions like this, but something really pulled me in. Your style of writing flows nicely. As I'm reading each chapter and picturing everything in my mind, it plays out almost like a coming of age indie film. I love the simplicity of the chapters and yet the intricacy that comes with the subject matter. I'm really interested in seeing Kat develop not only as an individual struggling with mental illness but also see her relationships develop with Rachel, Xander, Mrs. Green, and even James.

    I have a sister with anxiety, ADHD, multi-personality disorder, and compulsively lies. My husband is bipolar and I have OCD. So there is a lot with your story that resonates with me. I'm actually not interested in reading about a happy ending. I like how raw, genuine, and realistic this story is. Keep up the awesome work!

    Also, I'm not sure if you noticed, but a majority of chapter twelve is in italics. I think you just forgot to end Kat's italicized thought. Smile
    January 31st, 2017 at 04:23am
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    "Maybe I should try to grow tonight" honestly hit me really hard?? I guess because I can relate to that reluctance to try and let yourself get better. I don't know, but I'm REALLY enjoying this story.
    January 30th, 2017 at 10:55pm
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    @ Godmother
    This may be the sweetest comment I've ever received in my life. I'm so glad you're enjoying my story and it makes me so happy knowing that the themes I want to display are coming across well. Thank you again for this! You've really motivated me to write so much more.
    January 29th, 2017 at 09:08pm
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    Ok so I had not idea that this story would take such a dark and twisty tone as I was reading the first few chapters. I simply thought Kat was a girl who liked to be left alone with her plants. It's like the darkness is slowly coming though, each and every chapter hints more and more at it. I really like the pace you are taking with this, I like how easily I can connect to your characters despite their being only a small amount of detail given about them. It's all in the interactions they have with Kat and it shows really well. Can't wait to read more, I will definitely be subscribing!
    January 29th, 2017 at 04:21am