The Age of Blossoms - Comments

The one thing I'll say right off is that the background, for me, was a little distracting. I had to switch to the default to read because it kept distracting me from the writing itself. Your summary is very short, but coupled with the title I really did feel drawn in and wanted to read ahead the second I read that little sentence.

I love the personification of the seasons here. It's something I've seen done before, but not to this level. The idea of them all being lovers, and all having their distinct personalities based upon what happens within those seasons -- winter being cold and lonely, summer being scorching, autumn being the middleman (I love the description of half-warm, half-cold because it describes autumn so perfectly!) and spring being just perfect. The personification just adds to it as well because as much as I don't think about them as people, you have illustrated them perfectly here with such simple and beautiful words.

I also really enjoy how much time you spend on Spring, cementing the fact that it's Hoseok's favourite of the seasons. The description is more, and I like the philosophical nature to his longing -- if she was there all year round she would no longer be the novelty she is when she arrives. It's such a lovely way to think of it and I really do enjoy that you've added that in.

A couple of quick mistakes that I noticed:

- “It’s been a while, Hoseok” she greeted with a smile -- there should be a comma after Hoseok and before the second quotation mark.
- antecipate her departure -- should be anticipate

Additionally, there needs to be another blank line between paragraphs three and four as they're squashed together, and in the fourth-last chapter the last line is split over two lines accidentally.

All-in-all, I enjoyed this. As I said, it's something I've seen done before but not to this extent. It really does read wonderfully and aside from the mistakes above, it's a very strong piece of writing. Good work!

First off I absolutely love the title of this story.

The way you've opened up the story makes me smile. It gives off nice vibes.

Okay I see what you've done! This is brilliant. I really like some of your choices for words, I feel like there's a term for this but I can't think of it right now...

half warm and half cold - this is such a great description, honestly perfect.

You've really captured the seasons like they're personalities. I really enjoy that Autumn is a man.

Overall I find this quite a pleasant read.