Harbinger - Comments

Okay my first question. When is Noah going to die? I hate surprises. But Cassie shaw is a special girl and I can't wait to see what else these 'voices' inside her head tell her and what more the future has in store for this story. I'm so happy to see someone writing a deaf character! Deaf characters are so, uncommon in stories!

Second question. When is the next update coming and will Noah be in the story more? Is he a main character? Okay I realize that was more than one question but I cannot handle how much I already love this. Please update soon!!

I love this. I love everything about this.

Honestly, to begin: the layout is beautiful. The color, the simplicity, and as I read it only added and complemented the story.
This is such an interesting concept; her abilities give her one profound knowledge about the person she touches, but not enough to do anything about it. Am I making sense? I can't imagine having an ability like this, the whole knowing but not knowing enough to help the person would be absolutely gut wrenching. I both love and "hate" that you created this dilemma. Look at me, it's the first chapter and I am already heartbroken!

Noah... he seems like such a nice guy! And as a reader my immediate instinct is "HELP HIM! For the love of all that is good, HELP HIM!"

Please continue with this, I can't handle the not knowing. Here, take my rec and subscription!!

i absolutely adore the summary. it really brings you in & holds you there w/ all this brand of intensity.

the first chapter, the first line: "noah henderson is going to die." just brings you in with curiosity & remorse.

i like the way you simply describe noah. i could see him in my head, all the "nothing spectacular" & "honest midwestern visage." i also like how the narrator picks up on interacting w/ him, almost as if pitying his impending demise.

"but let's be real, if you heard voices in your head, would you tell anyone?" this has got to be my most favorite line in the whole chapter. thank you for blessing my night w/ this. i enjoy the way you've written the narrator. she's a very powerful character who knows the power of her powers (a lot of repetition here, excuse moi).

this is a very eccentric start to a great story! i can't wait to see what you have going on for this. you're off to a wonderful start.

This is written really well. Your character seems to recognize how her powers can be good or bad -- and also seems to be able to somewhat let go of the fact that she can't control the outcomes. I like how she takes out her feelings in her art, since it is a very common outlet for people who are outside the norm and have an emotional burden, like she does. Her best friend, Max, definitely behaves like most people do -- going forth with actions that seem contradictory or not good for us because we've rationalized it in our head. I think you have mastered characterization, and I really can't wait to see how you write the plot since you have such a good sense for knowing how to introduce everything without feeling like the first chapter is just a list of facts. I've subscribed and I hope you continue!