ooh, i love the intro. anything that regards a good revenge plot always has me tingling with excitement. & i see that this regard's an alpha's rage. someone fucked up. i would not want to be on the receiving end of that.
"i was about to destroy the life of the person that destroyed mine & i didn't have a fuck to give." i like how you basically take the gist of what's happened so far & put it in by far the most powerful sentence that could exist in this piece. & only two paragraphs in, i'm dead!
shit...shit, shit, shit, that was powerful. you have a lot of interesting twists & turns to the point where i didn't know how this was going to end. i really like the "alpha scorned" tagline you're going by & the twist of big brother wanting to exterminate the very thing he hates only to find that its his eventual demise. this was a great read!
"i was about to destroy the life of the person that destroyed mine & i didn't have a fuck to give." i like how you basically take the gist of what's happened so far & put it in by far the most powerful sentence that could exist in this piece. & only two paragraphs in, i'm dead!
shit...shit, shit, shit, that was powerful. you have a lot of interesting twists & turns to the point where i didn't know how this was going to end. i really like the "alpha scorned" tagline you're going by & the twist of big brother wanting to exterminate the very thing he hates only to find that its his eventual demise. this was a great read!