Falling Through Time and Space - Comments

Loving the new chapter :) I'm so happy to see Rose integrated into the story, and I can't wait to see what more unfolds for the three of them. It is sad that Zahra still gets married when she seems so uncertain about it, but I like how Rose and The Doctor were so compassionate towards her. I hope you update soon because I adore this story ❤

@ The Last Dance.
No problem! And yeah, that makes sense. Don't worry though, it's no problem at all :)

I think that would be a great idea! It would definitely make the story interesting

@ Nereid
Thank you so much for the great review! I uploaded the chapter through my phone so when I copied it from my google docs to here, it was not separated as it was on my docs. I am going back and editing it even more to be even. Enter.. I haven't watched Doctor Who after Amy as well but it was because I was lazy.

I want to bring Rose Tyler back as a companion and have her butt heads with Zahra. Would that be okay?

I just adore the premise for this story! The idea of a girl forced into an arranged marriage and rescued by the doctor is just fantastic, and so original.

I already love Zahra. A badass Indian-American, with a love of science and strong sense of independence and self-worth. She's the sort of assistant the doctor needed, but not what the directors ever would give us. A more updated version of Martha Jones, but entirely original at the same time.

Your writing style is lovely, and works well for your character. It's self-aware, but modest. You also have a good mix of descriptive moments and internal thoughts for a first person story, which I really like too.

The only flaw so far is that sometimes the paragraphs aren't properly separated and I imagine that's just because you wrote it on word or something similar and when you copied it across to Mibba it lost the space between the paragraphs, since Mibba somehow does that.

Anyway, this is an instant subscription from me. I used to love Doctor Who before Amy Pond, and her plot line just didn't sit right with me for some reason and so I never got back into it. I'm glad to see a story like yours which feels more like the traditional doctor who style of story, so I know I'll love it already.

Here's hoping you stick writing this and it develops into something amazing!