The Other Me - Comments

There's something so relatable about this subject matter, which is sort of scary if you think about how many people really relate to it. But I commend you for taking on such a big concept.

I know some other people mentioned that they thought of depression when they read this, but between the title and all the voices, it reminds me a bit of schizophrenia. With how the character feels like they can't escape, and all the voices telling them to do things they don't want. Either way, I thought you wrote all the voices and the struggle that the character is deal with really well. The fact that they are using suicide as an escape from everything going on is very much a reality to a lot of people, which is really sad but I like that you didn't shy away from it in the story.

This was a powerful piece, nice job.

There is a subtle impact behind these words that is very relatable. It speaks a very loud truth like a whisper. I think the part about your friends and family thinking you were crazy if they found out is a very big/sad statement because not only is that partially the disease it's also a fear all rolled into one which makes the storm that much harder to brave.

Towards the end it really gets hard to read because of how intense it gets. I commend you for effectively relying that.

The title and the layout are absolutely perfect for the story by the way.

And I was kind of hesitant to point this out because this is a personal piece, I know that from reading your blogs and from talking to you - but as a writer I think you'd appreciate it - the very first sentence (and as well as in the summary) you have it as "someone" but you go on and change it so there is more than one voice, which is fine - I totally get it - but as a story it's a bit contradicting in a way.

I really liked this

Well I'm crying already. This really hit home to me as someone who struggles really bad with self consciousness, Suicidal thoughts, and telling myself I'm not worth anyone's time.I don't have voices but I tell myself those things about being Ugly, Worthless, and unwanted. This was a fantastic display of emotions and the fact that it actually made me cry and feel for the girl really says something to me, you're a fantastic writer and I hope to see more stuff like this from you, I'm going to save this and re-read it over again. Keep up the good work.

This really hit me. I've felt this so many times before, I still do from time to time. Reading this made me slightly uncomfortable because of how suicide is mentioned. "Just jump and it'll be over" is something that's gone through my mind and many others'.

It's short but so full of raw emotion and it really sticks with you. I like how it doesn't even need to be overly detailed or descriptive to force the reader to truly think about this. The way you worded this makes it all the more crude and relatable. Fantastic job.

I can relate to this story so much. The voices you hear in your head, telling you just how worthless and ugly you are, the feeling that suicide is the only way away from them; and being afraid that everyone else will think you're a freak if you told them. This was such a chilling read and I think you captured it brilliantly.

What? I Didn't comment on this before? What the hell? Erin, I'm so sorry! >w<

I love the layout and this story, it's emotional and I think exploding boy says it better than I can. You poured your haert and soul into this story and it really shows. Don't let anyone tell you that you portrayed your experiences wrong because it's your experiences you're sharing with us, not ours. And I wanna thank you for that.

I think this is a really interesting piece because it conveys this idea of suicide being an escape route. I can definitely relate to that, and it's actually quite chilling to see it put in words like this. The idea that depression is this other person in your head who quietly picks at every little thing you do is definitely something that makes the idea of mental illness even more uncomfortable, and it's really terrifying to see it written down here. You've taken something inanimate and made it into this all-too-real, scary monster and you've done it well. It's definitely not easy to write about something like this and then show it to the world, but you've managed to put a face to it and give the nameless narrator that edge of sympathy with the audience. It's really interesting how you've done this, and it definitely chills me to the bone -- the suddenness of the ending actually made me really uneasy, but in a good way, if that makes sense? It's almost like you've got this sense of release and closure at the end and I think it's really unusual to see that in a story about suicide.

Fantastic job, really. I had chills while I was reading this.