October 10th, 2017 at 09:36am
There is a subtle impact behind these words that is very relatable. It speaks a very loud truth like a whisper. I think the part about your friends and family thinking you were crazy if they found out is a very big/sad statement because not only is that partially the disease it's also a fear all rolled into one which makes the storm that much harder to brave.
Towards the end it really gets hard to read because of how intense it gets. I commend you for effectively relying that.
The title and the layout are absolutely perfect for the story by the way.
And I was kind of hesitant to point this out because this is a personal piece, I know that from reading your blogs and from talking to you - but as a writer I think you'd appreciate it - the very first sentence (and as well as in the summary) you have it as "someone" but you go on and change it so there is more than one voice, which is fine - I totally get it - but as a story it's a bit contradicting in a way.
I know some other people mentioned that they thought of depression when they read this, but between the title and all the voices, it reminds me a bit of schizophrenia. With how the character feels like they can't escape, and all the voices telling them to do things they don't want. Either way, I thought you wrote all the voices and the struggle that the character is deal with really well. The fact that they are using suicide as an escape from everything going on is very much a reality to a lot of people, which is really sad but I like that you didn't shy away from it in the story.
This was a powerful piece, nice job.