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  • Rockheart_Jade

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    @ Damsel of Darkness
    Thank you so much for giving the story a chance! Your detailed comment was heartwarming! I actually had no idea my work was featured on the homepage! I truly hope you like the sequel, I am still actively working on it. In fact, I just posted a new chapter a day or so ago.

    So excited to hear what you think about it!
    July 10th, 2019 at 02:31pm
  • Damsel of Darkness

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    Stumbled here due to the sequel being featured on the homepage. Saw Brian and immediately felt compelled to check it out... Hahaha.

    The first paragraphs are heartbreaking. You can really feel poor Brian's helplessness and despair at not being able to control the situation him and his wife are in. And to be there alone, that would just make it so much worse because you have nothing but your thoughts; which often makes the situation worse. For example, his thoughts about the loss of Jimmy and how much he clearly misses his best friend. It hits the heart for sure.

    Sad that would be such a horrible situation to be in; knowing that your child and your wife's lives are in danger. I couldn't imagine the fear and confusion it would install in a person.

    Oh, Matt and Val are on their way. Good, he needs someone to lean on and occupy him so he doesn't burn a hole in the linoleum.

    Oh, the nurses reaction does not strike me as a positive one at all Sad

    Cry poor Brian. How horrible for him to have to face alone; at least for the moment. My heart is breaking for him.

    His plea to God is gut wrenching! Personally, I am not religious in the slightest, but I can understand the need to just put it out to the universe and beg for her life. He's in such a helpless position that I totally get the need to verbalise his desperation. I'm glad Matt and Val showed up when they did... he didn't seem like he could last much longer on his own without completely losing it.

    Naww, Zacky's plea to the nurse was adorable and so sweet. I can't say I blame her for giving in and finally letting Brian see her. I couldn't say no to him either... Hahaha.

    Oh, the nursery. That would be so damn horrible to have to deal with. I totally get being conflicted over not wanting to erase it, but not being able to face it. I suppose with a bit of grieving time, they'd find a way to deal with it, however was best for them.

    Well that was a great--albeit devastating--story. Very emotive, descriptive and entertaining. I am gonna read the sequel!
    July 10th, 2019 at 07:09am
  • MissMisery

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    @ Rockheart_Jade
    Oh honey... I can’t imagine. That is why the story is hitting home, that it seems so authentic. Because it is. Because those feelings are real. You are a treasure, and I hope being able to write this, having this release, will bring some comfort, some closure. Remember, nothing is sacred. Your baby was here, and so very loved. Celebrate him. I am here if you ever need to talk. Sometimes it helps to talk with people who are completely removed from the situation. Much love xx
    August 7th, 2018 at 05:17am
  • Rockheart_Jade

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    @ MissMisery

    Thank you for reading. I am very slow at updating the sequel. During the early chapters I was writing, I became pregnant with my first child. I ended up miscarrying and for a long time I debated scraping the story. I have decided to continue but it is hard for me still. I hope you enjoy it!
    August 5th, 2018 at 01:44pm
  • MissMisery

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    Oh my fucking... Having children of my own, this broke my heart. I’m going to read the the sequel now. I hope with my whole heart that they get through this... I can barely imagine the pain, the sorrow...
    August 5th, 2018 at 01:26pm
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    Thank you both for your comments. I was nervous about whether the depth and rawness would come through in the right way or not.

    Sequel is in the works. Will be a chartered story, not sure how long. Graphic, layout, bio all ready done and up. First chapter written but not posted, so the story is not visible yet. I should have it up in a dew days at the most. It is called Second Chance. It picks up not long after the last one ends so the beginning is definitely somber, and has the same heavy tone as this one does. All I will say is things are about to take a very interesting turn! Mr. Green Stay tuned!
    September 17th, 2017 at 12:15am
  • mdcustard

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    Beautiful, sad, heart breaking so glad there is a follow up
    September 16th, 2017 at 10:10pm
  • TheQueensofHiatus

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    so good! i totally felt his anguish. Very well written!
    September 16th, 2017 at 04:31am