July 10th, 2019 at 02:31pm
Stumbled here due to the sequel being featured on the homepage. Saw Brian and immediately felt compelled to check it out... Hahaha.
The first paragraphs are heartbreaking. You can really feel poor Brian's helplessness and despair at not being able to control the situation him and his wife are in. And to be there alone, that would just make it so much worse because you have nothing but your thoughts; which often makes the situation worse. For example, his thoughts about the loss of Jimmy and how much he clearly misses his best friend. It hits the heart for sure.
that would be such a horrible situation to be in; knowing that your child and your wife's lives are in danger. I couldn't imagine the fear and confusion it would install in a person.
Oh, Matt and Val are on their way. Good, he needs someone to lean on and occupy him so he doesn't burn a hole in the linoleum.
Oh, the nurses reaction does not strike me as a positive one at all
poor Brian. How horrible for him to have to face alone; at least for the moment. My heart is breaking for him.
His plea to God is gut wrenching! Personally, I am not religious in the slightest, but I can understand the need to just put it out to the universe and beg for her life. He's in such a helpless position that I totally get the need to verbalise his desperation. I'm glad Matt and Val showed up when they did... he didn't seem like he could last much longer on his own without completely losing it.
Naww, Zacky's plea to the nurse was adorable and so sweet. I can't say I blame her for giving in and finally letting Brian see her. I couldn't say no to him either... Hahaha.
Oh, the nursery. That would be so damn horrible to have to deal with. I totally get being conflicted over not wanting to erase it, but not being able to face it. I suppose with a bit of grieving time, they'd find a way to deal with it, however was best for them.
Well that was a great--albeit devastating--story. Very emotive, descriptive and entertaining. I am gonna read the sequel!
Thank you so much for giving the story a chance! Your detailed comment was heartwarming! I actually had no idea my work was featured on the homepage! I truly hope you like the sequel, I am still actively working on it. In fact, I just posted a new chapter a day or so ago.
So excited to hear what you think about it!