Between Heaven and Hell - Comments

Wow it’s always a good feeling when you feel hooked just by one or two chapters. I’ll be honest I’m not too familiar with Supernatural (don’t burn me at the stake I’m getting into it :P) I’m catching up haha. But I really like Arielle already, it’s refreshing when a character has some spunk and sarcasm you can relate to. Overall I’m pleased so far and can’t wait to read more. I’ve subscribed! Good work.

I absolutely loved the way you opened this story! With Arielle smoking a cigarette, the one thing her mother warned her against. It was so realistic to me and the way you described the smoke was beautiful!

I have seen very few stories where Claire and Jody are included, so it made me really happy to see their names in this! Of course Jody asked Arielle to stay with her, though. It's such a Jody thing to do and I'm glad you included it!

I'm wondering what part the brothers played to have her family end up dead and her alive.

I love that Arielle backtalked Crowley. It shows that she isn't afraid of him and also proves just how sassy she is, I love that!

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In an instant, she could be back with him in Hell, serving him for whatever purpose he deemed fit. He made her. He could easily take all of that away; her freedom was a gift. But he knew he'd be doing none of those things. A deal was a deal and as much as he led himself to believe he could care for a human, upholding a deal was the one standard he held himself to.

I'm really wondering what happened here and what brought them to the point they're at now! What was the deal based around?

I love the way you ended this chapter and I can't wait to see more! Well done!!