First of all, I just want to say that your banner is beautiful and that the layout goes with it really well.
I really like how you wrote the first chapter, especially the flashbacks that you added in and the description. YIKES! Her dad seems like a nasty piece of work, I wouldn’t want to go home either if that was what being there entailed. Oooo! I have a good idea who she ran into.
This opening chapter flowed really well between the present and the past, which isn’t always easy to do. I think you did a great job at entwining them together as well. I will definitely be reading further with this.
I really like how you wrote the first chapter, especially the flashbacks that you added in and the description. YIKES! Her dad seems like a nasty piece of work, I wouldn’t want to go home either if that was what being there entailed. Oooo! I have a good idea who she ran into.
This opening chapter flowed really well between the present and the past, which isn’t always easy to do. I think you did a great job at entwining them together as well. I will definitely be reading further with this.