First of all I absolutely LOVE your layout. Then again why wouldn't I? I love all your layouts.
Chapter One - If I actually really love this so far oh my gosh. The quote in the first chapter fits the story so well, I'm assuming it's a quote you used as inspiration? There are a couple times in the story where I got lost as to who was who, though that may just be my lack of comprehension. I also loved how you ended chapter one, it was quite the cliffhanger, and I loved it. (pun anyone?)
Chapter Two - You're This chapter definitely clarified the questions I was having about who was who. I also love how mysterious it is and how there aren't many background details. It leaves you wondering what the hell is actually going on. Which I love stories like this. I can't wait for this to be updated (if you're going to) because this story really has some great potential.
Chapter One - If
I actually really love this so far oh my gosh. The quote in the first chapter fits the story so well, I'm assuming it's a quote you used as inspiration? There are a couple times in the story where I got lost as to who was who, though that may just be my lack of comprehension. I also loved how you ended chapter one, it was quite the cliffhanger, and I loved it. (pun anyone?)
Chapter Two - You're
This chapter definitely clarified the questions I was having about who was who. I also love how mysterious it is and how there aren't many background details. It leaves you wondering what the hell is actually going on. Which I love stories like this. I can't wait for this to be updated (if you're going to) because this story really has some great potential.