The River and the Sea - Comments

do you know what made me kinda sad? this line: When someone finally told me that I was dead, I cried for days. IT JUST HIT SOMETHING, I DUNNO WHAT, BUT IT MADE ME FEEL SOMETHING. Wren is following Charlie somewhere. IS SHE TRYING TO SHOW HIM SOMETHING? SOMEONE? is that someone theo??????? WHDJOWSISHNSSWBKWS

Theo's chapter made me even more sad. Rav, why. Why do you this? I'm really sad and I feel for Theo. I just want to hug him. HUG HIM. OKAY. GIVE HIM A HUG. Also, the line, And he believed it. makes me think that's suppose to mean something???? like, it's indicating that she will eventually break his heart. AHHHHHH THE PAIN THAT I WILL EXPERIENCE ONCE THE STORY PROGRESSES

Reading the chapter about Wren just made me sad. I just...the chapter...RAVEENA WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME

On the other hand, Theo’s chapters are beyond cute! I like what we’re learning about the growth of him and Iselda’s relationship. THE FRENCH FRY THING AHHHH SO FREAKING ADORABLE

I am wondering how Theo and Wren will connect or how they’ll connect. WILL THEY CONNECT IN THE LOCATION OF WREN’S CHAPTERS??????

CAN I JUST SAY HOW MUCH I LOVED THE SANDWICH SCENE IN CHAPTER FIVE FOR A SECOND??? It's cute and enduring and I just love it. I'm loving the flow and the structure of where this story is heading because we can get hit with those surprises any minute! I need more, please!!!

Cuuuute! I can't wait to finish it! I would recommend making your chapters longer and more detailed. With a little work I'm sure you could pull it off! I want to know what your characters look like! I want to know how they feel and what their stories are. Don't be afraid to make it complicated! I want to see a connection between Wren and Theo. Are they brothers? Do they have similar personalities or recurring thoughts? Have fun with it!

oooo, i can't wait to find out how they know each other!

that first chapter was super mysterious and I am here for it. I missed your writing so so much because it’s simple yet intriguing. I love the pace and the vibe of this also because now, I’m just aching for more. THEO, YES, I LIKE YOUR INTENTIONS (but don’t be violent lol). IM EXCITED TO LEARN MORE ABOUT ISELDA (cute name, by the way). IM THINKING OF QUESTIONS LIKE—what is she reading, why is she there (did she know Theo worked there), how do they know each other, will she remember him??????????

why do I have a feeling I’ll cry at the end of this story
im not kidding lol

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