May 17th, 2018 at 10:01pm
Layout: The layout for this is gorgeous! I really love the burgundy background, I'm a sucker for anything that color!
Summary: I caught few errors in the summary, but other than that the story sounds amazing! I'm really interested in what Hope and Novian have together.
Chapter One: Oh man. The relationship with Hope and Nova seems like it's only going to get more complicated! I'm not really sure how I feel about Jake either, he seems kind of bossy. I don't know about him yet. I did see a few errors to the grammar, but it's nothing a quick read through won't fix! Other than that, chapter one is really good and I can't wait to read on!
Chapter Two:I'm a little confused on chapter two. I don't understand why Novian would be upset that Hope has a boyfriend after he left her for eighteen months? I mean, that's just part of moving on! I'm really not sure how this is going to go, but I have a feeling that it's not going to be good at all!
All in all I really enjoyed your story! I can't wait to read the rest!
Thanks. Appreciate the comment. To answer your question think about it like this.... Your seeing someone you loved deeply for the first time after 3 years and the first thing they do is give u a mind blowing kiss with intent to go further the last thing your going to think is there might be someone else. Then to hear his voice and know you were wrong is like a gut punch of rejection. You think 'y couldn't u just tell me you had a bf?' At least that is my experience being blindsided. On the grammer, i type and edit on my phone at least twice vefore posting. Sometimes i miss the little things