You're a really good story-teller. You capture the attention of the reader so effortlessly and I couldn't look away from the get-go. Your comparisons in the beginning were nice, and I could see how you both were different souls, but you still seemed to mesh well together. I especially loved the line describing her as whimsical, and how she could write you into your own.
I noticed a few typos in this, but they were small! The first was in the sentence, "She shined bright like a beacon in this world and I couldn't bearto look away..." there wasn't a space in 'bear to'. The second was when M replied with the title of the book. "It's" shouldn't be italicized.
Also, just wanted to put my own few cents in, feel free to ignore it... I think you did the right thing. These sorts of things are a really... grey area, I believe. There are always different perspectives and whatnot, lots of emotions. But I think you did the right thing because I'd like to think that she was given another chance to maybe find what could make her happy and comfortable in her skin. I can only hope she finds/found the help she needed and that she's happy.
Great job on this piece and I hope you can look back on it positively.
I noticed a few typos in this, but they were small! The first was in the sentence, "She shined bright like a beacon in this world and I couldn't bearto look away..." there wasn't a space in 'bear to'. The second was when M replied with the title of the book. "It's" shouldn't be italicized.
Also, just wanted to put my own few cents in, feel free to ignore it... I think you did the right thing. These sorts of things are a really... grey area, I believe. There are always different perspectives and whatnot, lots of emotions. But I think you did the right thing because I'd like to think that she was given another chance to maybe find what could make her happy and comfortable in her skin. I can only hope she finds/found the help she needed and that she's happy.
Great job on this piece and I hope you can look back on it positively.