This is really solid, great writing! I’m really drawn into this story and want to see where it is going to go! My only critique is that in the first chapter the paragraphs are a little stuck together editing wise. I would just space them out so the page looks better. But honestly I have nothing else to say because you’re a great writer! I can honestly tell that already. Also, Jaida reminds me of myself a little hehehe with the overachieving thing I’m interested to see how Erebus is going to get her to loosen up!
January 2nd, 2019 at 05:04am
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You’re welcome! Your writing is REALLY good!!