Are You Happy? - Comments

  • QueenOfTheCool

    QueenOfTheCool (100)

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    @ fala amo.
    Thanks so much for the constructive criticism, I’ll definitely try to work on that in the next update. Glad you’re enjoying it! Very Happy
    April 12th, 2019 at 05:59pm
  • lonely girl.

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    Hey!! This has been a super interesting read so far, the summary really pulled me in -- it's got it's shock value with mentioning Emily's death and I'm interested in how Willow is going to manage her interpersonal relationships and reinvent her goals and life plan.

    I can't wait to find out how she knows this Ashton guy, you've left the third chapter on a lovely little cliffhanger, however with your prose you seem to do more telling than showing, through your "I" statements. It would be nice to have some more plotline related things / characters described to the audience rather than told.

    I look forward to your next chapter!
    April 11th, 2019 at 11:14am