April 12th, 2019 at 05:59pm
Hey!! This has been a super interesting read so far, the summary really pulled me in -- it's got it's shock value with mentioning Emily's death and I'm interested in how Willow is going to manage her interpersonal relationships and reinvent her goals and life plan.
I can't wait to find out how she knows this Ashton guy, you've left the third chapter on a lovely little cliffhanger, however with your prose you seem to do more telling than showing, through your "I" statements. It would be nice to have some more plotline related things / characters described to the audience rather than told.
I look forward to your next chapter!
Thanks so much for the constructive criticism, I’ll definitely try to work on that in the next update. Glad you’re enjoying it!