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  • lonely girl.

    lonely girl. (250)

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    Mibba Master
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    21
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    Australia
    OH MY GOD
    This is so cute!

    The first chapter is hands down my favourite, you capture a child's thought process so well and it was so funny, especially all the cooties talk. I guess they caught each other's cooties in the end. tehe Anyway, I love the little links about the beach and the daisy towards the end, and it really turned into quite the sweet little love story.

    The only concrit I have is that in Australia, October is still quite cold (20ish degrees), especially with coming out of winter it's quite nippy, and we spell mum with a 'u'.
    April 11th, 2019 at 03:24pm
  • AngelicWasteland;

    AngelicWasteland; (100)

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    Task Manager
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    30
    Location:
    United Kingdom
    This is an amazing start! Eden and Luke have only just met, but I can tell from this chapter that they already have a special connection. They are both so shy and unsure, although Eden totally has the whole boy situation sorted.

    Dumbo lol that’s a great name for a Cocker Spaniel, plus the inclusion of Eden wondering if he can fly was a nice touch! The tearful separation at the end was adorable. All in all, I have no doubt that this is going to be a really cool story and I can’t wait to see how the entire thing comes together.

    Just on a side note: I really love your layout!
    April 2nd, 2019 at 02:52am
  • take my heart.

    take my heart. (100)

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    United States
    I'm not prepared for this, Molly! But, aw man, I love Eden and Luke already, they're adorable and you did so well writing them as children, I'm gonna lose it.
    April 2nd, 2019 at 02:37am