July 25th, 2008 at 07:26pm
Christ, Korynn.
How do you blow me away so simply, so easily in so few words?
That was amazing. Brilliant. Perfect. Fucked up.
I loved it. I love how you repeat words too. Its really good for emphasis and direction and just...Its great for building the storyline.
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And that's my comment :weird
Nahhhh :XD Here's the real review :weird
Firstly of all, holy shit :cheese:
Even though this piece isn't long but when you go and read it you get so engulfed and wrapped in every emotion and word that you feel like you've been reading it for hours; like you're actually watching a movie but unlike a movie it unfolds to you in every aspect where you don't even need to interpret their emotions. It's all out with its confusing and frightening clarity.
It had that sort of... fragile violence; well from Bert's side at least. You can sense... this... this mirror-clear hate from his side, like he hates Gerard for Jepha's death but then again he can't help being broken over it and it's like this distructive cycle over and over; hating Gerard then punishing himself by throwing his body at Gerard and letting him do whatever he fucking wants because it doesn't matter anymore; the man he's with isn't Jepha and will never be Jepha.
“Then fuck me because you hate me.” That line made me sick and fluttery at the same time; you can tell that Gerard has this hidden affection for Bert and basically... it's kind of this buried sympathy and sorrow. It -ironically- reminds me of the Sharpest Lives: You're the one that I need and I'm the one that you loathe. which perfectly fits because Bert basically loathes Gerard and partially blames him for everything that happened, along with hating him because Gerard was Jepha's shelter; the one who listened.
And I -personally- think it's because of how they're alike that Jepha wanted both of them [even though I'm not sure of the nature of the relationship between him and Gerard; friends or more?].
But I personally think they're bad for each other here >.> because with them being together -I noticed- there's always this air of memories because Bert can't seem to let Jepha go because of Gee.
And I loved how you tied everything to white lies; how Bert was sure that Gerard is lying and that they fucked each other >.> but the truth is... I'm not even sure who to believe omgno:
That was a really crappy review and I apologize. :shifty
Your writing makes me feel like a n00b :weird Honestly :XD You did a brilliant job on this and I need to read and comment more of your stories >.> ily.