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  • MyLipsAreLying

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    I love this story!
    The ending, where it tells you that the whole thing is her writing in her journal, reminded me of The Outsiders.
    I love The Outsiders.
    This story reminds me of The Outsiders. It was great Very Happy
    February 14th, 2013 at 08:23am
  • TheThirdAngel357

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    Have you ever heard of "The Breakfast Club"? Riley reminds me of the brown-haired girl and Dirk is like Johnny.
    January 7th, 2012 at 04:33am
  • southpaw

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    Okay...I'm sorry for commenting twice in a row, but I couldn't help but to read this all in one setting. There's so much raw emotion and character in this; even background characters have three-dimmensional personalities. You should seriously publish this.
    July 18th, 2010 at 10:40pm
  • southpaw

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    I'm in love with your writing style. I love how it reflects Riley's personality; I'm only on chapter 6 but I'm hooked.
    July 18th, 2010 at 09:50pm
  • Bast

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    And then Riley joined Anonymous and terrorized teh internetz.

    Lol I'm reading this again.
    September 28th, 2009 at 06:50pm
  • Ms.Marauder

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    Sort of reminded me of Catcher in the Rye, but with Chuck Palahniuk's writing style. So amazing!
    June 10th, 2009 at 06:15am
  • xXGreyWingsXx

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    Just read this.
    Hopefully Dujo/ an administrator won't kill me for commenting 30 days after the last post...
    But I just wanted to comment, cos I know I love a comment on an old story! In Love
    You've got the whole sketchy thought process down.

    *Chapter six : Guy Fawkes mask?
    *Chapter 34 : put a header to make it obvious we're in Dirk's p.o.v? Took me a while to get that!

    Finished! and it was awesome. :cute:
    June 1st, 2009 at 09:08pm
  • art.addict

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    This ws amazing
    *applause*
    I loved it =)
    And I'm definately going to check out your other stories
    March 28th, 2009 at 06:05pm
  • loverfayce.

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    Mibba is being smart with me, I just tried to post a comment and it didn't post it.
    I'm late. I just read this in one go. But I had to comment.

    I absolutely loved it. It was amazing. It's like the best thing I've read on Mibba, better than some published work I've read. I wish I could write like this. You should get it published. It could totally sell.

    Ten stars. You deserve it. This story was honestly just so goddamn good. I loved Riley's point of view. Caleb is a sweetheart. I love him. He's adorable. I love how he was so shy, but opened up more throughout the story. You made it seem so natural, how you did it gradually.
    Dirk reminds me of Rodgerson from the book Dreamland. It's by Sarah Dessen, you should read it if you haven't.
    This story actually reminds me a lot of Dreamland…

    Keep writing. You have an amazing talent.
    March 24th, 2009 at 04:16am
  • georgie95

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    BAH! I've just read this all in one go and I love it! I'm sad it's over though :(
    March 4th, 2009 at 06:14pm
  • Bast

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    -blink-

    Whoa. That was kind of like The Outsiders, except without the symbolism and gang wars.
    January 4th, 2009 at 05:19am
  • Bast

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    Not bad so far. Your concise writing style is hindering you only because you "tell" a lot, which is not inherently bad, but you might want to "show" something once and a while.

    Riley - decent character, but under her attitude and the way she talks and thinks and the way she handles people, there isn't an enormous amount to this character. A problem with having an MC like this is that it makes her very difficult to identify with; you might want to give her some traits that are more recognizable to readers. I know she's supposed to be a "freak" or "mental case" and everything she calls herself, but something identifiable might be nice.

    Other than that, my only real complaint is that I saw the rape coming. To me, it was predictable; to be honest I was kinda expecting it from the moment she met Dirk... but I think that's just because I know you. =P
    January 4th, 2009 at 04:53am
  • winslow06

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    Simply one of the best stories I've read.
    December 30th, 2008 at 10:11pm
  • Ink

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    Riley's soooooooooooooooooooooooo brave, i can't even measure up
    December 16th, 2008 at 10:52pm
  • love potion

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    That was definitely one of the best stories I've ever read on Mibba. And the ending was awesome. I also read how the future turned out, and it's so awesome that Riley got married and everything. :] Loved it.
    November 29th, 2008 at 12:48am
  • purplerawr

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    :O wow.

    i didn't expect it to end so quickly!

    A lovely ending though :D

    I feel happy to be one of those fans :) it was such a great story.

    xxx
    November 28th, 2008 at 08:36pm
  • evie may.

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    The ending was wonderful.
    Simple, yet effective.
    I thoroughly enjoyed this story but am sad to see it end.
    November 28th, 2008 at 08:46am
  • pam137

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    The ending was cute! I really enjoyed the story.
    November 28th, 2008 at 01:13am
  • cluttermess

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    Shit. Your story ended. That makes me sad. Smiley
    Ohh well i liked the ending though, specially the last three lines. Smiley
    November 28th, 2008 at 12:32am
  • Airi.

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    Aw, it's sad that the story is over. :[
    But it was a good story. :]
    November 28th, 2008 at 12:17am