I've seen this 'fairytale' concept used time and time again by many writers on this site—most based on Cinderella and finding her Prince Charming—so your dark take on the childhood fairytales most of us adolescents have grown up with will be a fairly interesting read. I find that it'll be especially sapid if you do succeed in altering these tales.
On terms of your layout, your summary is quite intriguing and will draw a reader in, though your layout is altogether too dark, rather dull and the writing is hard to read in dark green. These three factors may draw a potential reader away, so I suggest you change it—or keep it the way it is, it's your choice. Perhaps try taking a look at 'popular' writers on this site and their layouts; I find that most of them do, indeed, have nicely done layouts.
Now, your first chapter, though I believe it to be lacking in detail and length, was quite nice to read. There were few spelling and punctuation mistakes, but they wouldn't distract a intense reader's eye. Unfortunately, they did catch my eye—but I blame my attentiveness to detail on me being what my friends like to call a 'Grammar Nazi'.
Overall, this story has a lot of potential—though I've noticed that this was created in July 8th of 2008. If you plan to finish it or not is entirely your decision. You just need to work on it more, and perhaps write up more chapters. I wish you good luck.
On terms of your layout, your summary is quite intriguing and will draw a reader in, though your layout is altogether too dark, rather dull and the writing is hard to read in dark green. These three factors may draw a potential reader away, so I suggest you change it—or keep it the way it is, it's your choice. Perhaps try taking a look at 'popular' writers on this site and their layouts; I find that most of them do, indeed, have nicely done layouts.
Now, your first chapter, though I believe it to be lacking in detail and length, was quite nice to read. There were few spelling and punctuation mistakes, but they wouldn't distract a intense reader's eye. Unfortunately, they did catch my eye—but I blame my attentiveness to detail on me being what my friends like to call a 'Grammar Nazi'.
Overall, this story has a lot of potential—though I've noticed that this was created in July 8th of 2008. If you plan to finish it or not is entirely your decision. You just need to work on it more, and perhaps write up more chapters. I wish you good luck.