Secrets Are Untold Lies - Comments

I can't believe I forgot about this. Knock me off please.
That was awesome! I can't wait for more!
Make more!

:)

I must say, the new chapter is amazing like usual my dear Amberfoodle... Keep up the kickassness.... :arms:

YAHOO! Chapter Three is very well done =)
Very short, yes, but I'm happy you have the inspiration you need to feed us hungry readers more soon. YAYS!
Poor Frankie. Jamia should tell him soon, pwetty pweez. I don't like seeing him sad =(
Frankie is not meant to be sad! He is supposed to be happy! STOP IT JAMIA!
*is ranting to Cherry's characters again* *sanity is questionable*
Hm, if she hadn't been so drunk.... that hint was maybe a little over the top, I think, but it did give us something to think about.

Poor Jamia, too =( I hate how they are both so depressed for the same reason. Very lifelike. It's bitter sweet that Frank can tell whether her smiles are fake or real, too. I hope they work it out soon.

Loved it very muchly, and I'll be waiting for that next chapter you promised! *taps foot expectantly*

Any time now....

=)

Luv MOI!

I love how both of them are just like thinking if the other person is thinking of leaving him/her. It makes up for a very depressive atmosphere aroudn the whole chapter but also makes us realize that these two really love each other and would clearly be devastaed if one of them called it quits. They are drivven by their love for each other and yet, secrets are about to break them up even if their love would be strong enough to survive it. I'm sure of it.

I love how you wrote that Frank can see whenever she's showing a fake smile and a genuine smile. I don't think a lot of men can do that and it just makes up for the amazing person that Frank is to Jamia. E ven if she doesn't realize that he knows she's faking to make sure he doesne't know she's unhappy about something while he does know. Does that make any sense? It does to me.

I loved this chapter, honestly, great to see some more of your writing!

Lucky Strikes:

My God! I wish you would still update this. Please? :D

Don't worry, I'm working on it right now. It's on my list of stories that I need to update, haha. Second one from the top. :]

My God! I wish you would still update this. Please? :D

Jinxeh:

Ooooh, Jamia and Jackie! :cute: You should write it sometime...when you get the time. :shifty

Thank you! About the 'Jamia doesn't like to have sex in weird places' thing. ^_^ I figured it would be better than, "HONEY, I WANNA MAKE LOVE TO YOU IN THIS CABIN THAT EVERYONE AROUND US CAN HEAR INTO." "OKAY, BABE, LET'S DO IT." I just...I think a lot of people would rather not have sex in strange places, and to make Jamia uncomfortable about that seemed to bring her more to life. It's a little difficult to portray her as this brooding person with a deep, dark secret when she's so vibrant and lively. Also, you'll find out later why she doesn't like to get it on in places that aren't her house.... :D

And the fact that you found Frank saying the word 'fucking' to be the only mistake in my chapter means a hell of a lot to me. ^_^ It's true, he probably shouldn't have said it, but...it is the first night of his honeymoon, of course he's lusting over his new bride. ;D

...O_o I think this further proves my point that I don't want to go camping with your family. Especially with the body bag (which I'm assuming your mom brought along xD). :file:

Oh, don't you worry about that, your comment was amazing and made me smile like :mrgreen:. I'm not kidding. :]
I would have said that your comment made my day, but seeing Frank Iero and Ray Toro in high school gym shorts while playing onstage this morning REALLY made my day, heh. ;D

<3

I think I may have an idea as to what exactly Jamia did, but I'll stay silent on this one because you kindly asked us not to say our guesses in the comments. Though if I'm correct in my guess, it's only because a friend of mine recently went through a similiar experience, so that would be why it jumped to mind. But hey, I could be dead wrong. Mysteries! I love them. I think that should be obvious. Jamia and Jackie should get together sometime; I'm sure they'd get along fabulously. Evan and Jamia, not so much. They'd be fighting over their man. Tsk.

But anyway. I like this chapter! Frank is such a cliche romantic, and Jamia seems to be perfectly okay with this. Though Jamia, darling, are you sure you want him to keep cooking for you? I've seen pictures of what happens when Frank Iero cooks, and just because you got lucky this time around doesn't mean that such luck will keep occuring... ;)

I like the little detail about Jamia preferring not to have sex in places she considers strange. That's a very realistic preference to give to a character, and so I thought that was something good to add into it. Though I wonder if Frank, being in that happy-go-lucky I-love-you-so-much-oh-my-god mood, really would have used the word 'fucking' in which to describe it. I dunno, perhaps he let a bit of his lust flow between the words accidentally? ;)

I really hope this comment actually goes through. I'm sitting at the county fairgrounds outside of my family's camper, surrounded by drunk adults playing with fire and auctioning off toilet paper (I'm not even joking, sadly enough) and while I did sign up for Internet access at the fair board office, it keeps crapping out on me. So if this doesn't go through, I'll just rant and rave about how much I liked this chapter the next time we talk. :)

I wish my comments were as long as yours. Pah.

<3

GottaLuvMoi:

Yay! :D Cherreh iz happeh. :file:

Really, you like the cute little pet names? I thought I went a little over the top with them, though...:shifty I mean really, who actually calls their sweetheart 'baby', 'babe', 'honey', 'sweetie', etc. after EVERY setence? Nobody does. But I thought it might've fit in 'cause it was their honeymoon and all and they're SO HAPPY to be married and stuff....

Yeah, I'm rambling again. YAYNESS.

:lmfao @ lies..... :XD

YOU CAN TELL ME IN BIOLOGY IF WE HAVE IT TOGETHER THIS YEAR.

Merci beaucoup, hon. :hug:

And it's dialogue and deux. :coffee:
:XD

YES! Chapter Duex is BEAUUUTIFUL!
lol I *heart* it. I liked this chapter more than the first one because *ehemm, gets out reading glasses*

1.) It had humor-- which translates to "Frank appeared!" lol. The dinner thing was a great idea... and you got Frank down to a tee.

2.) Whether you agreed with me or not, you took my advice and made your sentences slightly less verbose. The diolouge probably helped with that. =) Speaking of diolouge, I loved how they called each other all these disgustingly adorable pet names after almost every sentence =)). It's one of those little details that makes the story awesome. Anybody can write a decent story if they've taken a couple of english classes: only a writer with natural talent can draw the reader in with the little details like you do =).

Again, a couple of little things, probably just little editing errors-- nothing huge. A misworded sentence here, passive voice there... but nothing I noticed right away. You rock.

And... my concentration on writing a comment just died. The Jonas Brothers are singing Beatles songs again.

Pfft you don't need a mile-long comment from moi. You get the gist. (The gist is Awesomeness, in case you couldn't tell)

More soon!

Luv
~moi

P.S I THINK I KNOW WHAT IT IS!!!...... lies. I have no idea. But I have a theory. Since I'm a good commenter, I won't say here but it's up here brewing *points to head mysteriously* MWHAHA I SEE RIGHT THROUGH YOU, JAMIA!!! Tee hee.

Confuzzled:

Oooh, I think I know...either she was pregnant before and she had an abortion...or she's a man! No, I'm kidding about the man part.

:lmfao

Thanks for making me laugh really hard. :XD

And thank you for your comment! ^_^ You'll see whether you were right or wrong eventually....

Oooh, I think I know...either she was pregnant before and she had an abortion...or she's a man! No, I'm kidding about the man part.

Weary Widow:

YAY NEW CHAPTER!!!!!!! Oh Cherry, I loved the new chapter... :arms: The writing is beautiful and more than I could ever do... I look forward to reading every single update because it's all so beautiful. And her it goes I'm gonna brag.... I know what the secret is... ^.^ I of course will not give it away to other readers....

:arms: Thank you very, very much. :D

Oh no, don't give it away to the other readers. That won't be good. xD

YAY NEW CHAPTER!!!!!!! Oh Cherry, I loved the new chapter... :arms: The writing is beautiful and more than I could ever do... I look forward to reading every single update because it's all so beautiful. And her it goes I'm gonna brag.... I know what the secret is... ^.^ I of course will not give it away to other readers....

lockandload:

Your writing is beautiful and this story is amazing.
Definitely subscribing.

Thank you very much. :D

Your writing is beautiful and this story is amazing.
Definitely subscribing.

Weary Widow:

I know you're going to hate me for this... but here it goes.... I know I've been badgering you about our story, but when is chapter two going to come out....? I want to see how Frank will react and I want to see what exactly Jamia will say. I love the idea of the story, and can't wait until it continues. :arms:

No problem, hahaha.

It should come out in the next couple of days, I'm hoping. A week at the most. I'm cleaning my room out today (and possibly tomorrow - I have so much unnecessary and childish crap in there I don't know what to do with it all! :XD) but then I should get back into writing. The ideas that I've come up with for the next chapter are pretty iffy...I don't much like them, and they're mostly just filler stuff.

Jamia won't be revealing her secret for at least another few chapters. I'm so evil, I know....

But I should get working on this soon. ^_^ Thanks for your support and eagerness at my writing. :D :arms:

I know you're going to hate me for this... but here it goes.... I know I've been badgering you about our story, but when is chapter two going to come out....? I want to see how Frank will react and I want to see what exactly Jamia will say. I love the idea of the story, and can't wait until it continues. :arms:

No problem, Maddy, I'm sure we'll talk about it some other place and time. *coughonourprofilecommentscough* ;D

Thanks for the comment, hon! :hug:

That was brilliant!
I would leave you a super-long detailed comment, but I have to leave the house in just under two minutes. :)

Cherry pwns!!!!