July 17th, 2009 at 11:30am
Josipa, my mom would just love your stories. :)
She's soooo addicted to NCIS and crime anything.
Nice writing, also.
:lmfao @ the small letters
- Kerplunk Girl:
- "Somehow I left her house smiling. That motion wasn’t quite familiar to me. But I smiled at her psychotic manners. And those muddy chunks I left on the white, fluffy carpet."
Sharon=BITCH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11111111 PICK UP YOU'RE OWN BRA.
I don't know what else to say. You're just too good. Tooooo good.
:lmfao Beep beep. XD
- Josipa:
- I'm glad you liked it. That woman is a bit** Beep beep.
I'm glad you liked it. That woman is a bit** Beep beep.
- Bastard Son.:
- Gloomy looking woman, a wretched woman opened the door. I think my badge convinced her to let me in. Hooray. Right. Matthew’s pictures were all around the house. Smiling from the walls. Fancy furniture, tinged with a mahogany gloss, freshly painted walls and fluffy carpets indicated some changes that happened after Matthew’s death. Plants. And plants. And some more plants reflected their green shine on the walls. No dust. Not a grain. Then I saw a calendar taped to a white fridge with green Sellotape. Today was a maid’s day. I sensed it. The person standing in front of me wouldn’t even touch a mop. Pathetic. Conceited creature. She was wearing shorts and a green sleeveless shirt; showing her belly button. Her wavy, blonde hair was sprayed with an indefinable amount of hair spray. One of the things that couldn’t get into my thick skull was her wearing high heels. At home.
Sean's detective side showing. >.< I loved this chunk. You characterized both him and offered us enough evidence to reach certain conclusions about that woman by ourselves, instead of simply telling us.
But I smiled at her psychotic manners. And those muddy chunks I left on the white, fluffy carpet.
And this made me laugh. Cruel, Sean, cruel... XD
I'm completely hooked.
Die, you're already on the list of my fans LOL
- Kerplunk Girl:
- "I didn’t like the room. The room of closed and unsolved cases. The room of silence, neon lights and numerous of names of dead or missing people. The room of secrets. I folded my arms. I felt lost in a maze of ghosts and whispers. I didn’t know where to begin. All I had, was the dead boy. And the playground. All figments of my visions; my mental disorder."
Do I even need to say how fucking great that was!?
God lord women!
I serious have no clue of where you learnt to write like that! YOU TALENTED PERSON THAT MAKES ME JEALOUS! :cheese:
The thing I love most about your stories is that you can read it without having to criticize anything and how you convey different feelings with your stories.
Both of your stories are a crime genre and still...They give you different feelings and images, which is something that is extremely hard to do! When I try to write something different, it's so god damn hard to give a different setting and emotion, without it sounding like my last story.
I'd loved to see my story of crime.
"My name is Bob, I have to find out who killed that guy that I found dead. I'm so kewl."
Iwant need more.
:lmfao
- Josipa:
STFU XD Should I update Gibbs now?
- Bastard Son.:
- Tease.
STFU XD Should I update Gibbs now?
- Bastard Son.:
- Tease.
I'm anxious to give it away (: But I'm dieing to tell you how it ends. *restrains self*
- Bastard Son.:
- I know. Modus Operandi is one of my favorites. 8) XD
You know I love you, right? So stfu. You are.
And no dying before the story's finished!
Then I'll shut up and wait.
"Modus operandi" - how I like those Latin phrases (:
- Bastard Son.:
- Okay, so I really wanted to hope that he didn't see the past this time. Guess not. Aaand we're back to our usual MO, you write brilliant updates and I get high off them. XD This was another amazing chapter. You're like, the next Patricia Cornwell...
And just skim through the 1st chapter for those typos, you'll see them right away. I only noticed them because I read that one twice. XD
check out mine?
from,
bethie
p.s. HUGE FAN OF YOUR LAYOUTS USE THEM ALL THE TIME!!!!!
MAKE MORE!!!!