Are You Insane? No I'm in Love! - Comments

Holy Crap. You NEED TO UPDATE SOON.
I just started this tonight. And I must say... I'm addicted.
So, could you pretty please update?
You're killing me. And not in the good way.

eeeeee more updates pleaseeeeeeee!!

Sorry deary that it's taken a while to read and comment already. :`(

I loved this chapter so much and thank you very much for dedicating this to me, like you said in your author's note. :`D I feel so loved! Yay.

Oh, and I thought it was really hilarious when she realised that she was thinking that she was attracted to the Joker like that, haha.

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- “Hey! Hey!” a voice rang out, snapping me out of it, “Toots! Hey! Can you hear me?” Joker grabbed me by the shoulders and shaking me, making me snap out of my trance,(end with a full-stop instead of a comma, please, and begin a paragraph here>>>) “Hmm? You say something?”

- I began to stifle a giggle, but I couldn’t hold it in. Soon I was holding my side I was laughing so hard. (Begin new paragraph here, please>>>)Joker cocked his head in what looked like confusion, “What the hell is wrong with you?”

- “I freaked you out. That right there is a signal the freaking apocalypse is approaching. Maybe you’re not as crazy as they say; since it appears you have some actual emotions in there. Perhaps I‘m making you soft there Joker(missing comma)” I smirked, snickering at my own comment.

- “I wanted to thank you… for, y’know… the cat(missing comma)” I pointed over at Nedji, who was curled up against the heater. Joker looked over at the cat and back at me. He ran a hand through his greasy hair, sighed, and looked down at the ground as if he was embarrassed. “You’re welcome(please put the comma here instead, before the speach-mark ends the dialogue)”, he mumbled at me and quickly left.

- “Meow(missing comma)” Nedji voiced her opinion, jumping up onto the bed. I furrowed my brow, thinking back to what I had learned in my AP Psyche class…

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You've written it amazingly deary. And you're getting so much better with the grammer and spelling, just wonderful work.

*Gasp:* Stockholm Syndrom? :O
I cannot wait to read more. Hihi. ^_^

I lovee this :DDD

This is really good so far. It seems like there is a lot of dialouge and not enough description, but I'm only in the second chapter.

Also, I find the age gap between them unsettling.

You've got good style and flow here. Keep up the good work!

Alright-y, now I've read up to chapter 14.

Oh, my God. It's getting so much interesting now! :D

And The Joker brought her cat for her! Unbelievable. XD

I cannot wait for more updates and find out what he's up to now, since he might or might not know that she's a Blackwell. D: Or ... he probably already does secretly, who knows?

Well, you do, obviously. But you know what I mean. ^_^

There were some spelling mistakes but other than that, amazing work!

Well done! :`D

Wooh. Chapter 9;

- “I didn’t, just trying to find something I can threaten you with. Now that I’ve found it…” <<< That was just out-of-the-blue hilarious. But exactly Joker-like! :D

- “Simple, I DIDN’T!” he cackled as we continued down the road. <<< That makes a lot of sense! XD

Ooh. One more spot left? :O
Loved this chapter, too!
Onward to the next chapter.

In my previous comment; I meant that even I make mistakes in my own stories when re-reading! :O

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- “I ground there bodies into meat for hamburgers” she stated blankly, making the clown’s jaw’s drop. <<< Hilarious come-back. XD

This chapter was funny. Wonderful!

Chapter 7!

- “My, my, don’t we have a tendency to fall off of things?” the man snickered. (Please begin a new paragraph>>>) Jen just sighed in frustration, “Well excuse me, but I’m not used to waking up every morning to find Bobo the Clown sleeping next to me!”

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“So, why are you here? You look like you’re too smart for this shit going on here” he asked.
(Begin new paragraph here, too, please>>>) “Well, to make a long story short… family argument, ran out, got into a bad part of town, now I’m here… there goes my dream of being a psychologist.” Jen sighed as she slouched down into her chair.

And there were some more missing commas, but it's like I've already mentioned in the previous comments.

Oh, my God, she's actually going to stay with The Joker? And that Krist guy seems nicer than The Joker anyway ... but ... oh, well. I shall read one! :D

You're a really good writer, by the way. Even I make mistakes that I cannot see when re-reading, I assure you, haha. But it's really amazing! Good job.

*Gasp*
Chapter 6 was so sad.
Although, The Joker is clearly an insane person, I can't help but feel happy!
The Joker ish one of my favourite characters. And I don't normally read fan-fictions, but your story has be hooked.

Well done!

Yep, chapter has been read. XD

- 'Now why can’t more guys like Dr. Crane in the world?'

I suggest a couple of options for this above line to something like these;

1. Now why can’t (there be) more guys like Dr. Crane in the world?

OR;

2. Now why can’t more guys like Dr. Crane (exist) in the world?

- “I. Am. Not “seeing” Jonathan! He’s a good friend and that’s all it will ever be! God, why can’t you guys get that through your thick skulls?!”

I suggest that you use: ' when quoting others inside these speech-marks ( " ) that you've used in the above one. Or the other way around. I hope I don't sounds confusing. XD

The point is. When using these: " ... use single ones: ' ... to type any quotes. Yep. o.0

- They’re cannot be anything wrong.” <<<I know it can be easy not to notice sometimes, between "they're/there," however, this time it's supposed to be "there"... 'K? :)

I really enjoyed reading this chapter, and the suspense at the ending was just amazing! Makes the reader want to know more already. It's times like these that make me glad there is a another chapter installed already. Mwuahahha! >:D

Completed chapter four now. (I don't think I've ever read and commented on anyone's work this fast. XD)

- “Holy crap, this place is huge” I said getting out of the jeep. (Please begin a new paragraph here>>>) “I know, I said the same thing on my first day here. You’ll get used to it” said my dad as he began walking toward the entrance to the facility. And other than a few more missing commas here and there and a spelling mistake, I'm so head over heels for your story.

OK. I'm sounding a bit silly now.

But. Whatever. XD

This Jonathan guy ,.. hmm, let's what happens! ^_^ I'm liking the turning of events and already hearing about The Riddler and stuff!

I've read the third chapter now. ^^

I, DarkMystique, confess that I am now in love with your story.

But I knew it that it was too good to be true that she cannot actually work with any of the patients.
This is going to be very interesting! :D

- I said my thanks and gave a quick goodbye as a raced out the door, my school crap already packed and raced out the door. <<< You wrote 'race out the door' twice, it's unnecessary to mention it twice.

I suggest something like this; I said my thanks and gave a quick goodbye as a raced out the door, my school crap already packed. Yeah. Just delete the ending. :)

Hope it's helpful.

I had already mentioned this in one the the prior comments, but I thought I'd remind you once again; “COMMON DAD, LET’S GO!” I suggest for you to swap 'COMMON' ... for 'C'MON' ...

I've read Chapter 2, now. XD

- When it comes to my little brother, if he were stuck the choice between saving your life, and receiving chocolate chip cookies… chances are, you’d be dead. <<< Love that. XD Adorable little brother, isn't he?

I love the kind of relationship she has with her family. Beautiful. And I love the bit of humour you've added. :) Like, how she can joke around with her father, like friends. You portray your characters' personalities really well!

I laughed at this part though;

- My father cleared his throat, “… Jennifer, your mother and I were talking and-”

“I swear to God whatever is it, I didn’t do it! It’s all Bryan’s fault!” I said quickly in defense.

She didn't even wait to hear them out, hehe, aw. Oh, my God. I've actually 'awed' at a fictional character. But I guess that's how much I like your story the, yes? Yes. We shall stick to that.

Oh, and I saw some missing punctuation, like commas, but that's about it. Nothing that can't be corrected.

You're a good writer, m'dear!

Sorry! :O I meant that I've only read chapter one[/]!
Now I shall move onto chapter two. XD

Hi!
I took your advice and read your story. I've only read chapter two, but I shall continue reading it.
In fact, I've come to like it! :)
So I've subscribed and will keep up with it in the future.

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- “Aww, mom common the slightest amount of disapproval is the last thing I need from you. Besides, psychology runs in the family!” I debated.

I suggest you to change this: "common" ... to this instead: "c'mon...
because your readers can get slightly confused. I did. But when I re-read the paragraph I'd realised what you had actually meant.

Update! Update! :) I love it!

This sounds really good; I just found it. :)
I'm going to subscribe and read it when I get home.

I'm not really a big fan of the joker but I like how you have written this. I like how it sounds so natural and that he actually said all of these things.

Time to update.